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~ Absolution ~


~ God ... ne'er censures, echt penance. ~



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I wrote this for a 5 word contest where my task was to write a poem that also offers a story within it.


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Here are the definitions of the words that I used.

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#1 God (The only one that I believe in)

God (as in "spiritual being") n. : the supernatural being conceived as the perfect and omnipotent and omniscient originator and ruler of the universe; the object of worship in monotheistic religions

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#2

ne'er (as in "never") adv. : not ever; at no time in the past or future; "I have never been to China"; "I shall never forget this day"; "had never seen a circus"; "never on Sunday"; "I will never marry you!"

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#3

censured (as in "censured") adj. : officially rebuked or found blameworthy; "the censured senator did not run for another term"

censured (as in "censured") adj. : officially and strongly disapproved; "the censured conflict of interest"; "her condemned behavior"

censured (as in "censure") n. : harsh criticism or disapproval

censured (as in "excommunication") n. : the state of being excommunicated

censured (as in "reprimand") v. : rebuke formally

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#4

echt (as in "genuine") adj. : not fake or counterfeit; "a genuine Picasso"; "genuine leather"

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#5

penance (as in "repentance") n. : remorse for your past conduct

penance (as in "sacrament") n. : a Catholic sacrament; repentance and confession and satisfaction and absolution

penance (as in "punishment") n. : voluntary self-punishment in order to atone for some wrongdoing


A contest entry

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Comments


  • Sunkissed xo
    November 22, 2008

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    What an interesting, powerful write here. You raise a most complex topic in a few short words, it's fantastic! Well done Thanks for entering the contest!
    - Sweet Blue Eyes <3