The battle songs were ringing in the distance
The sounds of terror filled the stifled air
And the echo of the weapons filled the heavens
A ricocheting history everywhere
The solid ground we stood on now was shaking
The memory of our peace was pushed aside
The war cries sounded loud from every corner
Of our earth through every country far and wide
Tanks rolled out to meet the moving forces
Smoke and fire and blood was everywhere
And the cracking of the rifles left an echo
That lingered in the blackened smoky air
The raging seas were filled with ships all over
Beneath the waves the submarines did glide
And in the skies the mighty fighters thundered
Alas from here there was no place to hide
And the mighty spirit called on all the Angels
For below a war of hate was sounding clear
They were sent to bring back all the fallen
And every angel called had shed a tear
They moved across the lands so filled with anger
And their wings had touched the dying and the dead
And the waters of the earth had risen sharply
Because of all the tears that they had shed
Then silence fell upon our earth so lowly
The mighty spirit lifted up its hand
And it banished there the demon that came calling
And had shaken every corner of each land
And the Angels lifted up our fading spirits
And peace had come upon us all again
And the only tears you’ll see the Angels crying
Are those that fall upon us when it rains
21.3.2005
In a list
Comments
1 - 35 of 35
-
You know, I coudl just read your war-based / military poems all day. Each of them has such a person story to it, and so ... gosh, so vivid! I almost feel like I'm right there as I picture it all - and this was just another masterpiece! I'm strugglign to choose my favourite part -
the image of the waters rising due to the floods of tears is so tragically beautiful, but then, the spirit having a hand - gosh... I just don't know! Loved it, as always
-
-
Thank you. I really appreciate you dropping by and reading.
-
-
Another superb write. You seem to be very in tune with this time in history. You write of it in such a sensitive and reverent fashion, capturing all the emotions of that time. Your rhyming is faultless too, what I call proper poetry. Sheila
-
-
Thank you so much. I guess i picked that up from my father who served in the army in North Africa in ww11. I always had a yearning to know everything there is to know, but i guess noone will, will they?
-
-
Superb plus
A very fine write indeed. Imagery; rhythm and rhyme are just fine. Thanks for sharing this one with us. Again, well done.
-
-
Thank you, mate. I appreciate your comments, as always.
-
-
If Only...
... there were that spirit who could grasp and cleave the demon ...but... reality sets in.
Very nicely written.
-
-
Thank you so much for you comments. Much appreciated.
-
-
Hi Condor
One of the best poems I've read of this genre among amateur and celebrated alike.
Extremely pleased I happened by it today!
Congratulations on your spotlighted poem.
Worthy of that and more!
John
-
-
Thank you so much.
-
-
-
-
Thank you.
-
-
omg
this poem is so sad.. i have a friend that is in the army..well i have LOTS of friends that are in the army.. my boyfriend is getting ready for basic training.. i dont want him to go..but he says he has to. so yea.. my friend is getting ready to go to iraq. this poem is wonderful! -
-
Thank you my friend for your comments. Your boyfriend has my blessings and may he stay safe.
-
-
Smooth rhyme and rhythm, just enough imagery to paint but not make horrific, overall just terrific. The reference to the tears of Angel's crying took me back to being a child, Mom used to say God was crying for all the sadness that he saw.
-
-
Thank you. I think you mom was right. I heard when i was a child that every star was a soul waiting to be born.
-
-
amazing..
normally i don't like poems that rhyme but this is really good. I definetly got the message... -
-
Thank you. That is a compliment worth its weight considering you don't like rhyme normally. I appreciate this a lot.
-
-
indeed so.
-
-
-
Astounding...
Outstanding...crystal lyrical prose. Poetry with the texture of long ago...and now.
Wonderful my friend...wonderful.
Wolf
-
-
Thank you so much my friend. I always love your comments.
-
-
excellent write! The imagery is very vivid...could sense the action all around, smell the smoke and hear the sounds of battle. A very enjoyable read.
Rory
-
-
Thank you so much. Appreciated for sure.
-
-
truly a work of art, definately deserving to be in the spotlight
Well done mate
-
-
Thank you, my friend. I did not get to see it there. I was only told.
-
-
Damn I like that one. The writing is superb and I'm going to nominate it for the front page spotlight. I'll be back to read some more. Happy trails,
-
-
Thank you so much, David. I really appreciate your comments and am stoked that you should do this. Bless you and your Dogs! p.s What type of dogs do you have? I owned a border collie once but that was many many years ago.
-
-
Brilliant
Amazing images of war jump out in this write...Truly a great read filled with details and emotions. Deserving
-
-
Thanks, mate. Your comments are truly appreciated.
-
-
Vivid imagination. Great write
-
-
Thank you, mate.
-
-
Parhaps paw-writer has a point. You write as if you were present in the midst of the battles, a participant, not an onlooker. Indeed a very powerful poem. Throughoutthe poem you have kept all the technical aspects of poetry perfect. Moving, emotional story teling in poetic perfection. Truly excellent.
-
-
Thanks, Bob. I guess it has a lot to do with taking notice of what i have been told over the years and putting it into words as if that person were telling me. Your comments are wonderful. Maybe i did live a past life. I often dream of being in some battle. One particular dream ever reacurring. Once again, i thank you so much.
-
-
Wow!
You have penned a very powerful piece here, and it is almost as if you were actually there in the battle zone. Are you sure you did not live a past life where you fought many wars?
Amazing imagery puts the reader into the very painful scene to feel the emotions within. Great write! Blessings, Patty
-
-
Patty. I really appreciate you wonderful reply. I am so touched. This poem was an oldie again i had lying around. Thank you so much.
-
Adding your comment:
1 - 35 of 35
