he told jokes
with clear-sky eyes
that twitched slightly
and fled
from the throwing-around
of crushed paper;
gave his email address
for a simple question
and mean sentence fragments
for begging.
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Nov. 22, 2008
In a list
Starting a portrait series.
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Wow!
I read 3-4 of these Portrait poems and they are all amazing. Loved this one and #4 the best. Great work!
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Interesting Work!
I like the details that paint the portait in your picture. It is unique to me. Keep writing my friend! -
Hood Wink!
You have a talent for portaits that just amazes me!
I am mesmerized by this one
♥
Stay safe
~Manda
(Apologies for late Hood-Wink!)
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100th Hoodwink!
Economy of language can speak volumes. These three words say so much already , not just about eye color, but clarity of "vision".
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100th Hood-Wink!
I feel like I'm looking at a picture. With so much detail. Yet I feel like I know less than when I started. Amazing. Truly amazing. I commend you.
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100th Hood-Wink!
I feel as if at the same time I got a good picture of the person (in the portrait), I also had no idea who this person was at all. You have written this amazingly and I comment you on this write. Cheers
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oh wow, is this what you were talking about the other day? I'm glad you got it started
And I think this is amazing.
Can't wait for the rest of the series
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It looks as though this is going to be a wonderful series, Diana. Loved the idea of it..each poem a diary in itself.
~ Nicolette
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Thank you!
Though it hopefully won't be like a diary... if there's one challenge for myself in this series, it is not to put any of my feelings and interpretations in but just portray people as they are.
Hope you'll enjoy
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