A life of luxury, a lie I live,
7 thousand corpses,
Rotting for eternity,
Rise my darlings,
The walking undead,
Seek your revenge,
Cease this finality,
Take back these sticks,
And take back the stones,
And crush,crush,crush,
Slice open my chest,
Stab this beating black heart,
Remove this heavy burden,
It weighs down my bones,
Set my soul free,
This unfair guilt,
it has plagued me,
Your faces embedded
in my memories,
I see your anguish,
Feel no pain,
A bloody war,
Made an excuse for us all,
The triumph we saw,
The chaos we caused,
Now let us remember,
What we must forget.
Six, six, six,
Million,
In the grounds custody,
Your face,
Unrepentant,
Uncaring and insane,
You know only what you fear,
And take only your gain,
No criticism,
No wrong and no right,
You take the easy way home,
How dare you escape,
So easily,
You give up the fight,
That you failed to win,
You left us all with this mess,
All ruins and remains,
Gods creature your not,
Nothing but a demons beast,
You are the darkness and evil,
You live on self worth,
Of misery you feast,
Your soul you sold,
Now the price you will pay,
Rot in hell,
My eternity.
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"A bloody war,
Made an excuse for us all,
The triumph we saw,
The chaos we caused,
Now let us remember,
What we must forget."
that is my favorite part of the poem. This piece of poetry is stunning and captivating, truly remarkable. There is so much feeling and emotion pored into each line and every single word; makes you think, I love when poetry makes you think that’s the best part about poetry the thought and feeling lingering in your head after words see now you know you did something right I’m ranting aren’t I? I just wanted you to know that I really enjoyed this write keep up writing well penned literature bravo! You should be proud. -
I love this! is it possible to turn it into a song?
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hey thanks,lol
i would if i could sing haha
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I like the multiplicity of meaning in "Take back the sticks,
And take back the stones." I saw it as either taking back the natural world, physical sticks and stones, or a reference to "sticks and stones may break my bones," maybe insults offered. The latter seems to make more sense in the "seek your revenge" context, and also brings up the idea of living in glass houses and casting stones. Basically, reading the lines made me think of a lot of lines and references. Nice work. ^_^
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Strong and deep here, it's like a mix of everything, love and biblical stuff, kinda scary too at the same time, because this sounds like the end of the world and you getting revenge...
Powerful writing from you!
And welcome here at all-poetry too
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Wow.
Hey there, welcome to AP! I only joined this 2 days ago, so we're both new to this!! You'll love it!Anyways, this poem was amazing, you're obviously really talented! Normally I wouldn't enjoy poems like this but yours was written so well that I did. Well done. abi x x x
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