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The truth about artist

He brought her life,
when she sat like a rock.
Where her eyes dulled
like shallow pools,
he gave them a radiation
that would make the sun turn green.

Her figure was lacking,
one could compare to a matchstick.
He ignited her form and
made her beauty blaze off the canvas.
A face only a mother could love,
if she had been drinking.
With the tip of his brush,
 he gave it an appealing nectar.

A smile that could launch
a thousand ships;
hurrying the other way.
 He gave it that glow
that made all men obey.

As his paints brought
 life to the lifeless, she frowned
when he was done.
in her mind everything
he painted wasn’t the real her.

He smiled and told her,
“A artist always paints a lie,
in order to show the truth.”

Author notes

Disturbed Prodigy

I wrote this cause of something said in V for Vendetta, Writer lie to tell the truth, well i think that is the same for all who wear the mantle of artist. Take the girl in this poem, not much to look at, but the artist saw something more then that, he saw what was on the inside, that is what he painted, a lie to show the truth. i am come back to reedit this, but for now tell me what you think?

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  • LylaEmoriaCullen
    October 28

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    I like this poem, it reminds me of how people always say "it's not the outside that counts, but what's on the inside".... He painted what he imagined her feeling like on the inside......... Keep it going

  • Sinner69
    October 19

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    SAD

    THSI WAS REAL SAD AND NICE ALMOST LIKE HAVING YOUR DREAM GIRL IN A GLASS JAR NOT BEING ABLE TO TOUCH SMELL OR HOLD HER...SAD BUT LOVELY...BUT U FELT THE PASSION IN HIM TO KEEP HER IMAGE ALIVE.


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    December 11, 2008

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    I really loved this piece. Funny that you should make a reference to V for Vendetta because as I was reading that movie was going through my mind. Very well done.
    I loved the total concept of the poem.
    Congratulations on the Bronze.
    Soulful Woman


  • LylaEmoriaCullen
    December 5, 2008
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    Wow

    This is a cool poem Aaron, keep up the good work


  • Meroza
    November 30, 2008

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    This is a well written poem and I adore the hidden meaning in it all. This is brilliant! Keep up the good work


  • chilali
    November 28, 2008
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    Wow. That is all I can say about this piece. It is marvelous! Well done!


  • Ryno
    November 25, 2008
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    "in her mind everything
    he painted wasn’t the real her"

    How often do we feel that in life, not just with a painting? Are we ever the real... us? And how would we know?

    This piece is so inspirational and really makes me ponder things. It also really brings me into this piece and I could almost see that picture. Love the last lines too.

    Well painted, you!


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    November 25, 2008

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    Awesome - Love it!!!

    Great use of metaphor and imagery. Wonderful moral to the poem in the end... Thank you for sharing your muse's creativity with all of us, I'm wishing you the best of luck in the contest!!! Peace always, xx Cyn


  • lillypilly
    November 24, 2008

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    as always superiour to my intellect... nah im kidding... this is amazingly simple but at the same time intricaly beautifull... great stuff as always... i bow down in reverence... lol
    xx. pixi


  • Dalaney gold member
    November 23, 2008

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    a definite bookmarked poem. There is a beauty in this poem that goes beyond what most would expect - the images and the language are superb. I haven't read an ending so well done in a long time. Bravo. Love, Lane


  • acari27 gold member
    November 23, 2008

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    really loved
    He brought her life,
    when she sat like a rock.
    ...her eyes dulled
    like shallow pools, -dulled like shallow pools v.nice

    gave them a radiation
    that would make the sun turn green.

    i wasnt sure i loved the way this flowed but i sure loved what it said, and it kind of grew on me, like it couldnt have if it was worded differently


    He ignited her form and
    made her beauty blaze off the canvas.

    the beauty blazing off the cavass-really great that image and flow

    laughed at
    A face only a mother could love,
    if she had been drinking.

    i found the flow a little awkward in the 2nd last stanza but it kind of didnt matter, because the content was really meaningful...

    Nice idea for a piece. wish i had of thought of it.

    i love the V mask...its debonair and sexy at the same time


  • Water Dragon
    November 23, 2008
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    i really like this one as a artist myself i understand


  • liltulip gold member
    November 22, 2008
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    Very nice...thank you for sharing


  • Antipodi
    November 22, 2008

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    Wow this is absolutely stunning so visual and talks so much about the muse in tragedy excellent write


  • Sir Squigglim
    November 22, 2008

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    Amazingly well done. The detail is vivid. Not to mention the last stanza is magnificent.

    Truths bear false intentions; lies highlight what's really there.

    Ironic, but hey, you showed it perfectly!


  • luna-midnight gold member
    November 22, 2008

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    aww wow....the ending is just so amazing and powerful, and i really like this piece all together. nicely done and good luck
    Stephaanie ♥


  • greeny
    November 22, 2008

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    “An artist always paints a lie,
    in order to show the truth.”

    hmmmm... yeah,yeah, what can i say..
    tsk,tsk. this is a rocking piece, i love it..


  • LadyDementia gold member
    November 22, 2008

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    I think that is an excellent take on what was said, a lie to tell the truth...nice! I did one similar to this, about an artist painting a while back but yours is so different and so much better The imagery is clear and the message within strong. An excellent write hunni! All the best in your contest


  • Swan song gold member
    November 22, 2008

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    ok I think this is a very very good write I love the turns it takes and the smoothness is excellent.
    The ending is sensational. However if you want critical comments you need to make the latters bigger and change the background to whites or blacks or soft blues with good dark colors for words
    I would also suggest you left align but that could depend on the contest,
    It is important however to make the lettering and
    such easier on the eyes. To get a good idea of your poem and how good it is means it must be read several times several times out loud and then contemplated.
    I can tell your stuff if moving rapidly along
    and I think it is excellent!




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