I meet him at the cafe every week
we talk of this and that and share a coke,
sometimes he disappears to take a leek
it happens just before he tells a joke.
It seems he's lost his job down at the vets
became obsessed with the receptionist,
a leggy blond they call Jemima Getz
he really thought he was top of her list.
The trouble with this chump is plain to see
he always clings to things he cannot woo,
poor Jem' would find him hanging on her knee
not easy when you need to use the ' loo'.
A contest entry
- 20-100 words -59th Contest/Quickie/No PIF/ by Spiritualangel by spiritualangel.
650 points, ended December 23, 2008, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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The trouble with this chump is plain to see
he always clings to things he cannot woo,
poor Jem' would find him hanging on her knee
not easy when you need to use the ' loo'.
Beautiful. Best of luck. -
Just...
...a fair effort IMHO ; though at least you rhyme.
I think the other critiquers have been overly kind.
Worth a bit of the clap.
R.
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Thanks for the laugh this gave me, an excellent take on the picture prompt...but you really want to watch who you hang around with...they might have bad habits
All the best in the contest
Love Suz
xxxxxx
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Great Fun -- Terrific Poem
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ha ha lol a brilliant take onthe promt good luck in the contest
maralisa
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