His last breath was mourned in great grief
His last breath was shaken and shallow
But oh the agonizing release was blessed a gift
Freedom and peace fell upon his bloodied body
Allowing his soul to celebrate.
Eternal embrace of life lifted him from the living
A contest entry
- death is but a fine breath by adsaige.
700 points, ended December 25, 2008, 15 entries
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Well done, you have really captuared the intent of the contest prompt, this is a most moving poem, blessings with love John
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Eternal embrace of life lifted him from the living
i love this, and this part makes me think of a child being lifted out of a crib, i don't know why, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest -
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T.Y. ! Struggling but still making the attempt to start writing again... this time without being so doom and gloom LOL.
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powerful ..
what a triumphant song you sing!excellent
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Thanx sweetness... as you can tell I am having some difficulty in the writing area of my life.
Trying to change my perspective and all that jazz.
Anyway thankz again for the comment.
Peace and love
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