Did she deserve this “punishment”,
at only ten years old
She tortured her with no remorse,
that’s how the stories’ told
No “mercy” did she show that day,
with the killing of her friend
With a spoon; dug out her eyes,
I just can’t comprehend
She had the “crave” for cookies,
and poor Julie would not share
Took a knife and hacked away,
most of that young girl’s hair
Her teacher said that she was smart,
“blessed” with the gift of gab
Then cut her friend most horribly,
twenty times they said she stabbed
They found no way to shed a “light”,
on just what happened next
Finding her doused with gasoline,
this little girl is really vexed
The parents said she would be home,
before the streetlights “shine”
It’d been two days since they had heard,
their hopes they did decline
A “sacred” trust was broken,
between two girls at ten years old
What do you do with narcissistic child,
who’s homicidal and so cold
With an “ardent” hate for others,
she did slaughter her young friend
Do we jail this young girl forever,
is that what’s to be her end
Or do we treat her as she did,
are we “immoral” just like her
Death to those who murder children,
do you get what I infer
I find no “rainbow” in the sky,
I have no answers to this query
This tale of truth and murder friends,
does make my heart feel weary
Author notes
light
blessed
sacred
immortal
punishment
rainbow
shine
mercy
ardent
crave
Artwork:M_U_R_D_E_R_by_lozz_metallica atdeviantart.com
A contest entry
- The Darkwrite Challenge Final Round by Ktulu Blackwolfe.
1750 points, ended November 30, 2008, 4 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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congrats in the contest; i really thought you would place silver at least, but, i being the other honorable mention have to say that just making it to the final round is great, eh?
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You did an amazing job with your challenge this round.. Very well written and laid out for all to feel the emotions that flow with the telling of the story.
Riftkin
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Wow!
This is very dark and befitting for the picture that you used as your prompt as well. You really made good use of your word bank as well too. This picture however, with the house behind it, reminds me much of Lizzie Borden, which happened just a couple of hours from where I live. More-so because of the house that is in the picture, it bares striking resemblense to it. Your story however, depicts the picture of the little girl and the knife too well.
Thank you for taking part in this challenge, it has been a pleasure to read your entries and know that I have become a fan of your work. I wish you the best of luck in this final round.
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This is an incredible write! Quite dark in areas, with some awesome imagery! Very neat read
All the best in the contest 
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OMG the imagery is so horridly real. Tell me is this a true story I pray that it isn't. You are a fantastic writer and can make any tale seem real so I just had to ask. Your poems always flow so effortless and is a joy to read. Good luck in the contest and God Bless, Your Friend Jo-Ann
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Thank You
As always your comments are taken to the heart. It is not a real story just something I came up with from the picture to fit the contest. Though today one would not be suprised to hear it on the news. Thank you again for reading and commenting you have been a great friend, Boog
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Great story, your flow is right on and the tone is perfect for this dark write. good luck
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whisper
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