This light feeling
over took me
and each step
was like walking on water
but I feel my foot slipping through
I’m going under;
Is it your fault you’ve made me realize that life means happiness
and jumping off walls,
biting off pen caps
balancing them on the tip of my tongue
hoping to keep it busy
so that I never slip these three words
even though I wish with all my heart
that I could say them…
you realized that I’m all you ever really wanted..?
funny how I got there too…
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Songs play constantly
and this smile hasn’t faded
since the day that you first said hello
I’m living off
three hours of sleep
and I’ve never felt more awake;
Passionate
and alive
how do you do this to me?
Did you tickle me from the inside out causing my whole body to think it was infatuated?
Funny how it never thought that it was being attacked…
It’s your fault
It’s your fault
That I’m amazing…?
Author notes
ok this one
i like
because...
hope you do
i feel so gay...
In a list
A contest entry
- I Want The Best of Pre Writes by theredcatjazzoflove.
700 points, ended November 25, 2008, 29 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Pumpkin Pie by GypsyEyes.
400 points, ended December 22, 2008, 38 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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amazing!!
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came and read it again?
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so you are my new favorite person for this write! LOOOOOVE it! thank you so much for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! ~CarnalNineTailedFox
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awww
thank you so much love
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This was lovely. It made me smile. The wording+imagery was brilliant and...light at the same time.
'Songs play constantly
and this smile hasn’t faded
since the day that you first said hello'
These were my favorite lines.
[wish I could relate]
Great job!
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thanks honey
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and you will
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i like this its something so different and so new and you put so much love into this write here it was a pleasure good luck in the contest
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You are my sun
I think thats the translation. It was great and very moving. Great pictures in my head from the poem. I loved the images that it created. Good metaphors. Sweet poem.
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i think... this is one of the best ones i've ever read =D i can't even begin to describe my love for this. it's absolutely captivating, amazing, and just... whoa !
i'm so glad the title got my attention ! otherwise i would miss a masterpiece !
lol and that would be horrible 
though of course you'd have many more to come =]
your poems are usually short and sweet, but this is long and sweeter ! i don't have a favorite part, because i love it all ! great job ! you deserve more than 3 applause's, but i guess it will have to do !
<3
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aww
thank you so much
im glad that you like it
and by the way
cute pic
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ah thank you -blushes-
lol i finally gathered the courage to actually post a picture of MYSELF
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well its cute
lol
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Is it your fault you’ve made me realize that life means happiness
and jumping off walls,
I could really relate to these lines. How someone can twist your heart in such a way that you want to do something crazy and outlandish though it usually ends in broken bones and hurt.
This is really amazing, You have a way with making emotions beautiful that I can't even put words too.
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aww
thank so much sweety
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biting off pen caps
balancing them on the tip of my tongue
hoping to keep it busy
so that I never slip these three words
even though I wish with all my heart
that I could say them…
.... story of my life. mhm
It’s your fault
It’s your fault
That I’m amazing…?
the question mark at the end is important. and clever
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something told me that you would appericate that
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thank you
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your amazing.
this whole poem is just,
ahh.......
"funny how it never thought it was being attacked.."
haha
you made me laugh :]
and think of bearterflies
lolll
so much fuggin love,
oldschool
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thanks im glad you like it
i think that is the best thing we ever came up with
bearterflies
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im trying to cheer up
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you have more they that, just look for it
and then when you find it.. keep focused..
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uh i dk
really i dont hahah
umm
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bloop
bearterflies
and of course its amazing
umm domination?
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lol girls arent supposed to be able to make boys laugh haha
whats wrong with you!!
why arent you laame!! haha
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hey your talking to the feminist here
stop putting girls down lol
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man, this poem is so amazing..
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they just like knocked on my door out of nowhere and were like
were looking for a place to dance and be happy..
how could i say no.?
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maybe ishould be mor accurate
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but you didnt
and i did
hha
thanks
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I know what its like holding back "I love you's"
god. if I'd only knew then
not to hold anything back
because sometimes they're just scared to say it too.
great poem
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gracias
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OH, I am so glad I read your poem, it tickles our souls,
and make us want to chew on pens with ya!
laugh and feel those beautiful new feelings of first love..
well done poet, you put tap shoes on your pen,
and we couldn't help but dance along!
well done!
well done!
ears/Seattle
you are amazing!
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thank you so much
i love this one
soo much
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