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ascension

Missing image
ascension' s promise
transcends practicality
peace of heart and spirit
presence of mind required

the journey begins
grounded in ancient teaching
all is not in vain
exceeds all limitations
windhorse  carries our blessings

Author notes

lungta Tibetan for windhorse

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  • Fritz O skennick gold member
    December 20, 2008

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    Wow, so pretty...

    Serene, tranquil & Peaceful...
    Congrats on a well deserved shiney...
    Keep up the good work...
    Well done!!!

  • ea silver member
    November 28, 2008
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    wow, that's beautiful that they refer to this as windhorse. Congrats on your winning poem.


  • Draig aine gold member
    November 26, 2008
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    Namaste

    lungta windhorse is always with me. precious jewel


  • penman gold member
    November 26, 2008
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    Wonderful

    this has a great flow and well expressed. Best of luck in the contest.


  • The Fun House silver member
    November 22, 2008

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    This is poetry. Beautifully written, full of imagery and gives just enough room for the readers mind to explore it's own perceptions.


  • Swangrnv gold member
    November 22, 2008
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    nice

    very interesting piece. really refreshing and new, i like that!


  • Tristania
    November 22, 2008

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    I REALLYlike this but the last line didn't make sense to me since I don't know what that first word is,lol!
    Just change the k to an l in the last word.Also perhaps start the 1st word in each line with a capitol letter and find a more "worthy" and "suiting" background so that your words really strike your readers' hearts.I find that a more dramatic background helps set the mood or "tone" of the poem and helps get readers to not just read and process your words but to FEEL and UNDERSTAND them.Your poem was a delight to read!Just needs a little tweeking.

    • Draig aine gold member
      November 22, 2008
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      Lungta

      is Tibetan for windhorse, many prayer flags carry an image of a horse with a jewel on its back, that s lungta or windhorse carrying blessings and prayers around the world, I changed it back to windhorse and found the misspell in blessings, thank you for your kind review

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