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because you could.......

The night fell upon me,
like a tun of bricks.....
as your words pierced through my heart
like bated knives,
leaving me inside myself....
searching for comfort.

I was despondent ,
as emotions suffocated my eyes
leaving me UN able to see the truth,
as you became just another lie....

Suddenly the lucidity of the moment,
was nothing but a magicians table of chicanery.
and I became the mockery of this act.

Waiting for the curtain to fall,
I wanted to feel you bow before me
with the pleasure of my pain,
as I listen to you take advantage of my plee
to hurt me.......and so you did.

Effortlessly I move on,
as my thoughts linger through me,
like shadows staggering in the dark....
waiting for there next host.

I refuse to fall into such words of dishonesty
as I lead myself to the door,
looking back I ask myself.....
why?
looking back I tell myself...
because you could.

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  • heavenshelper
    June 9

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    eaving me UN able to see the truth,
    as you became just another lie....This line says so much,..some times it is a wonder how we manage to place trust in people again and again only to be let down over and over and how we manage to still have faith in humanity after being continually hurt is a wonder. Misplaced love, misplaced trust,misplaced faith...all so easy to do when guided by misplaced truth in other words...Lies! This is a sorrow filled write Misty and i felt every word of your pain.Very well written indeed....Don't let the bad ones drag you down my friend ....keep the faith because there are still a few good souls out there :-)


  • Beautiful-N-Broken gold member
    February 17

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    leaving me UN able to see the truth,
    as you became just another lie....

    I love these two lines. This write reminds me of the song "Take a Bow" by Rihanna. You have a talent and are a great writer.

    Great write!

  • lover22
    February 2

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    Misty this is a great write! Very deep and obviously very personal. you have combined dark and light into a perfect blend with this piece.Nicely done ! ( my friend ? ) from One Who Is Whitewinged


  • desert places
    January 18

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    This is an eerie poem that seems to express the blatant failure of a person to maintain your trust. I get this strange image in my head of a dark stage and though you're talking to someone else, you're the only one on stage.