One dark night
No moon at all
On hands and knees
I crawled
In a forest dank
Evil animals call
Something shoved me
And I did fall
Lost in this strange place
A net of creepy lace
Spiderweb upon my face
Shivers down my spine
A hand reached out
Attached to a vine
It grabbed my leg
Shreiking this one is mine
The trees began to hiss
The brush closed in
Thorns pierced my skin as
Branches clawed my sides
I thrashed around
My limbs were bound
Only a sucking sound as
Leaves plucked out my eyes
I cried a scream
Is this a dream
The forest answered me
No - all humans must die
A contest entry
- I Want You to .:.Scare.:. Me!! by DecorusApparatus.
550 points, ended January 5, 31 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Comments
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Interesting rhyme scheme but it works, the thoughts and imagination are right on enjoyed the personification
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Now this poem scared me.
The imagery here was fantastic and the clear language helped. There are good things about both complex and simple langauge and both can be done wrong but you got your point across excellently leaving nothing out. I really fely all of the emotion and the imagery was fantastic. It truly did send shivers down my spine, and it was totally believable.
"The trees began to hiss
The brush closed in
Thorns pierced my skin as
Branches clawed my sides"
This stanza was perfect in each and every way. Got right into my soul it did. Thankyou very much for entering my contest!!
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I adore this! Amazing force of description...terror and fear was shown greatly. Enjoyed!
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wow
what amazing imagery, it grew more intense and vivid with every stanza, i loved it!
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wow i love your imagry and the discriptions the way you get me to see exactly what you want with the minimam of words is a beautiful talent, it sent shivers down my spine then back up again,
i loved this stanza the most
A hand reached out
Attached to a vine
It grabbed my leg
Shreiking this one is mine
a wonderful poem well done
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