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Leave Me Breathless

Leave me breathless
And take it all
Because it has always
Been yours

And hold my hand
Cause I'm just begging
For something that
I can hold onto

Look in my eyes
And get lost in it all
Cause for us
Lost is the best place to be

While I'm waiting
And wishing
Hoping posibility
You will always leave me breathless

Author notes

i dont know i have kinda had the line "leave me breathless" stuck in my head for a while ( i think i just butchered it)

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  • patrick20traveler
    December 14, 2008

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    It's fine!

    Not butchered. It seemed clear to me. I notice you use the new spelling of "posibility" although I still think the extra "s" as in "possibility" has a sexier look. Just an old fashioned bias.