summer
memories sway
underneath evergreen,
our initials reappearing in
daydreams
Author notes
cinquain
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A contest entry
- In ten words by Lavender Butterfly.
550 points, ended November 22, 2008, 18 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I love the resortment
With the ending equated together, "memories sway underneath evergreen" may be grouped as the tree for visualizing the moment, even years later. And, all childhood happiness like this hangs there, swinging in your mind. "initials reappearing" is so hilarious literally, there's a party of play here. Each abbreviated name running for their turn cycles fast and precious as sparkles almost. To let your imagination free upon this ride... perhaps a game wondering about last name change already, to recall back to!
Very intricately describing the heartful intent of kids, congratulations,
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nicely penned . . liked "memories sway" and "reappearing in daydreams" . . congrats on the gold !!
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congrats on the gold
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loved it
can feel the emotion so vivid
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Sweet, sentimental, the joy of memory.
Well done.
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beautifully drawn... x
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This is a nice and sentimental touch on the picture. You are so good with cinquains. Best of luck in the contest!
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