She watched the messenger taking flight
She watched through trusting eyes
Until he was but a blurr of white
Receding in the skies...
She watched God's writings unfold
And fall across her lonely night
Like an ancient scroll
Penned in silver light
There was darkness on the horizon
Yet she felt no fear, no dread
For she was in the process of rising
Having risen from the dead...
these are a few of my older verses slung together
hopefully in a poem.
Author notes
If my writing makes no sense it means there are writings about sense
If you click and don't review you cost me points and go on my ingore list.
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Well
I like your writings about sense better.I dont really get it.I guess I,m a fool who cant digest whats before me.
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Your writting has a lot of good points
there is always someone who will see things a little different , the beauty is there fools don't take time to digest what you have placed before them. Keep writting little one...mac -
Your writting has a lot of good points
there is always someone who will see things a little different , the beauty is there fools don't take time to digest what you have placed before them. Keep writting little one...mac
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This is beautiful I loved the imagery.
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Wonderfully written!!
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Great imagery, and for whatever reason gave me a bit of a chill. Suppose the whole rising from the dead thing might do that to someone. ^^;; Great job!
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it very well should give you a chill and to anyone else who has keen insight into other realms. thank you for commenting
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I'm not particularly fond of rhyming schemes,
but this one was orchestrated beautifully.
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Ooh
Such a fine pen you have and it really flows very smoothly. -c
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Wonderful and elegantly written. It is surely a great poem! I lovethe imagery as well as what, very well, could be take as the meaning. It has a graceful flow in the writing and pulls the reader right along. For just a few versus slung together, this is incredibly well done!
Keep Writing and much love,
~Ayven
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oops, I thought this one seemed familiar
I clicked on it twice.
I appologize
hugs Moony -
This flows beautifully and builds, each phrase lifting the next. It felt a little funny at the end... for she was in the process of rising... and the "having risen" bit made the tense akward, but it is very possible that I'm not reading it right, or missing something- and often that does happen and I read a few more times and it all comes together... so, that being said, let me just say, that this is a beautifully written poem. Your word choice is brilliant and I wish I could just "Sling" together some old phrases and have them come out so artfully! Nicely done!
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I like everything you are writing
and I love the pure white background
with the faded picture of you
wonderful effect
bravo
hugs Moony
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Visions
Complete splendor. To find a rebirth of wonder. May the gods allow such delight.
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