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Samsara


Wandering devoid
of direction or purpose
floating specks
waiting
for the final gust of wind.

Ribbons delicate and divine
relentlessly shredded
purple, black, blue
mix towards bleeding bruises.

Long fingers grasp
pulling the emptiness
shrouded in silence.

Still air teases and torments
concealing

incessant mould
that creeps unbroken
catching unaware eyes.

Constant thoughts drip
clothed in madness
warping unfulfilled images.

Picked up and brushed down
continue in perpetual motion
trudging blindly.

Stuck on rapid replay
unravelling over and over
until final dissolution.

The wind catches
leaving behind
slumbering vacuity.

 

 

 

Author notes

Samsara means the endless cycle of birth and suffering and death and rebirth.

no rhyme!

A contest entry

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Comments

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  • Reptile Lady gold member
    December 3, 2008

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    Free verse OMG and well done to you for this awesome darkness.
    Love the colours used to incorporate the bruising
    Best wishes in the contest
    Love Julie


  • Fritz O skennick silver member
    November 25, 2008

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    Wow... Love this...

    I'm getting to be a bit of a fan of your freeverse stuff... They don't come often, but when they do, look out & strap in for the ride...
    Seriously impressive stuff that enthralled throughout...
    Well penned, well versed, well done!!!

    PS: love the BG too, enticing, intoxicating & delightfully dark...


  • Lost Vampyre Angel
    November 24, 2008

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    ooh i like bow to your title, seriously awesome poem here honey! sooo evil and demented but thats why i love your poems, your flow is perfect too! all my love
    kitty xxx

  • Victory Gin
    November 23, 2008
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    Samsaric indeed!


  • notorious
    November 22, 2008

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    Free verse?

    How did I miss this one?

    Love that last stanza; it ends on the perfect note.

    ;
    Jessica


  • kiwigirljacks
    November 22, 2008

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    Woweeee

    no rhyme!! hehe... awesome write hunny!! Wow yes, I think you've captured the feeling of that Samsara perfectly here!! I think we both know what cycles can be like, let's hope like hell they don't continue after death

    Love this!!!!


  • afroqban
    November 22, 2008

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    This is so awesome, i am impressed. the first time i read your work i added you to my favs, over time i see your work keeps its same voice, but has matured. its cool to see someone really grow in their craft, you are even more amazing than before. well done. much love and respect to you.


  • broken-colours
    November 22, 2008

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    That is a bit disturing, actually, or at least the background is. *shields eyes* This was very well-written and I like the italicized words; makes me pay extra attention to them & gives them more emphasis than they already had on their own merit.

    Thanks for entering.

  • crimsondew
    November 22, 2008
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    A dark piece done well...in your forte...
    All the best in the contest!


  • Maxboy gold member
    November 21, 2008

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    Wow, this is so sad and realistic, like a downward spiral.

    Very Good....Best wishes in the contest


  • aboomer silver member
    November 21, 2008

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    Great wording, images and emotion! love the dark tones. I especially like,

    'floating specks
    waiting
    for the final gust of wind.'

    i think many of us feel that way sometimes.
    I like this!!! Well done!!!
    best wishes in your contest.


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 21, 2008

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    i have to just say that i am in awe by all of this i mean really, this is nice, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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