The winter snow is falling;
And I’m missing the fabricated warmth of your words.
Pristine artificial happiness echoes from frozen pixelated screens.
Laughter bounces off walls, unheard.
Glittering ordainments dangle off white fake flushed trees.
Cash out, indulgence in.
TV specials for pathetic celebrations.
Christmas roast and Hollywood toasts.
What’s a happy holiday, when you’ve lost all the words left to say?
New years party for newly purged addictions.
New decades don’t differ from old.
Futile tears stream from disappointed faces;
Whilst the successful bask in their luxurious intoxication.
What decadence for such a counting of time.
Bedside sighs and anticipating eyes.
What’s a happy holiday, when you’ve lost all the words left to say?
Birthday gifts wrapped with cheaply sort after paper.
365 breaths off the ever wanning list.
Parties to show how many friends you lack.
Tick yes for failure.
What a disaster of youth.
False smiles and sanity trials.
What’s a happy holiday, when you’ve lost all the words left to say?
The winter snow is falling;
And I’m missing the fabricated warmth of your words.
Author notes
the holidays are coming soon. why not get into the cheer?
inspired by a song written by the Mr William Beckett.
A contest entry
- Holidays Depress You?? by aboomer.
700 points, ended December 4, 2008, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Its Christmas Time In The City (( Hoilday Prompts;; MANY )) by HereComesTheSun.
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• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Christmas Blues ...you got em'? by redhanded.
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be ORGINAL. the world doesn't need {ANOTHER} faker. ((so DON'T take my work))
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I like this.
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such a great piece. full of emotion thanks so much for your entry and best of luck to you in this contest and in the future
andi
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i dont really see happiness in this piece overall its not exactly cheery but truth ALSO AND BUT i loved it overall it just was an overall amazing poem that had a great inspiration starter and really just blows the reader away with its magnificence great work
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oh excellent=] thank you. yeah it wasn't intended to be happy; sorry if i didn't comply with the rules enough
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Very deep. This is an original and mystifying take on Christmas.
Thanks for your entry, and good luck
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I like your wording and emotion in this....creative and vivid in images. One can feel the under-lying sadness, the sense of loss, of lonliness. And a lot of truth in this also.
I did feel some of your lines were a little long, but all in all - this was nicely done.
Thank you for your entry
best wishes in the contest
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you wanna know what i realized that being complimented for MY shitty poems when you wright poems that sound like HEAVEN i had to whisper it under my breath its great i love the way you wright kaitlan their is always something so intoxicating about it
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naww!! *swoons in caty;s undeserved compliment*
DOODE!! your writing is BREATHTAKING, i read it, i get sucked it, yet i'm never sucked out, i just linger over the words of your amazing prose.
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Oh wow... you just get better by the minute with your writing. This is amazing, Im speechless again. =)
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