the flesh is absent,
picked clean by birds
that shot holes
through the body
and loved her
to
the
bones.
Author notes
So... I've seen The Birds way too many times.
Yes, that's what inspired this, but obviously, there's more to it. It's actually based on a dream that I had last night. I'll write a longer version of this later.
I hope this is what you're looking for!!!
Anyway, on another note, I have successfully finished my 100 poems in 100 days 11 days early!! This would be the 100th poem. I'm so proud of myself, lol.
In a list
A contest entry
- Pick a word - Write a Poem in 10 LINES or less (C) by The Fun House.
1050 points, ended December 14, 2008, 19 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
kind but constructive criticism please.
Comments
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Short and absolutely powerful. The ending was unexpected and I really like that. Also has a wonderful metaphoric quality.
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Yikes. lol.
Excellent play on words. This is an excellent example of how to do 10 lines and say something.
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Thank you.
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and loved her to the bones....f'in sweet. deffinatly write a longer version. it'll turn out sweet. great write.
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i hope to see the longer version soon.
it'll be interesting to say the leaast
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this is incredibly fascinating!
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