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A White Curtain

A white curtain draped over the landscape
No view, no scenery until
The morning sun creeps ever upwards
The  curtain fades slowly
Nature's beauty is restored
Vague shadows materialise from nowhere
Colours shine again as trees appear
Morning is in control.

Author notes

Carl Sandberg wrote that "Fog comes in on little cat feet" In river lowlands fog awaits the early riser.

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  • Nom de Plume
    December 29, 2008

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    Isnt fog amazing, like a crisp blanket of soft water... excellent write mate, though I did struggle with the repeat use of slowly...
    but your imagery paints a lovely picture


    • rbruce gold member
      December 29, 2008
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      I can see how you struggled with the repeat use of 'slowly'. It should never have happened. I shall edit and change to something more suitable. Thank you my friend for a great comment and for your honesty.

  • xxcandycanexx
    December 8, 2008
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    cool poem

    Write one about Christmas or something

    • rbruce gold member
      December 8, 2008
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      Many thanks for the comments, i do appreciate them. Christmas is quite different here. No snow, hot sunshine, dust usually. quite different from the winter Christmas you may be thinking of. I did write one called "Celebrations". have to think of something else maybe.

  • Draig aine gold member
    December 1, 2008
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    thumbs up

    very well done


    • rbruce gold member
      December 1, 2008
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      Many thanks for your comments. Input is always appreciated.

  • Jesaan gold member
    November 23, 2008
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    Lovely.
    Good imagery..a lovely scene unfolding as the fog lifts.


    • rbruce gold member
      November 23, 2008
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      I am blessed with an ever changing view from my home. Thank you for your comments, I appreciate them.

  • Jasmine 1
    November 22, 2008

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    A very sweet and beautiful description of a borning day...fog covers everything, no color, no life...only a white curtain.
    Very beautiful poetry.


    • rbruce gold member
      November 22, 2008
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      My kitchen window looks across the neighbour's paddock to the river. In winter there is fog, and thick fog, then the rising sun slowly clears it away and the scenery comes from out of nowhere, all beautiful and natural. I try to do justice to it in writing. many thanks for your great comments.

  • arafura gold member
    November 21, 2008
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    Beautiful imagery. This is wonderfully well written.


    • rbruce gold member
      November 21, 2008
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      My first real try at free verse. Glad you liked it. Many thanks my friend.

  • condor gold member
    November 21, 2008

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    This piece told me of a great heavy fog hanging over the land and a cold mist laying as a carpet. The morning sun draws the curtains back and reveals the beautiful land that had been sleeping through the night. An excellent piece with so much vividness involved that really made me smile so much. What a joy it must be to stand or sit at your windows and see this beauty unfold before your eyes. I am so glad you can share your wonders with us. Just amazing. I wish you all the best for this contest and go, Bob.


    • rbruce gold member
      November 21, 2008
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      I think this is the first time in my life where mother nature has laid out such variety from the kitchen window. I am glad you enjoyed it, as it it quite beautiful. I always welcome your comments as you express an honest appreciation of what you have read. I thank you and value your opinion.
  • Bob Fox
    November 21, 2008

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    Bob

    I get the idea that this view is something that inspired this wonderful write. Perhaps a morning gaze into natures true beauty.


    • rbruce gold member
      November 21, 2008

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      Yes Bob, my kitchen window once again. My first venture into Free Verse. Nature is very kind to me and changes the view often. Many thanks, kind sir, for your compliments.

  • poetrandy gold member
    November 21, 2008
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    Very good imagery!

    Fine poem! Goods luck in the contest!


    • rbruce gold member
      November 21, 2008
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      Thank you kind poet. This is my first attempt at Free Verse, I am usually a traditional rhyming type writer.
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