I spend my time holding out
Assuming, what you care about
Is something that defines a need for mysteries.
If I could wipe our past away
I'd do it each and every day
until we had new words to celebrate.
Your friends can say I'm yesterday's
News in every single way, but that
Can't stop me anyways from loving why I hate you so.
Your love is like the Boogie man
Endorsing a used mini van
Swinging from my ceiling fan
Into my dreams, into my mood
I've been dumped, but never chewed.
To make me fall the way you did?
Was like dosing me with bad acid,
and ditching me at Disneyland
Yes, it's funny how they'll "tell you so"
Then turn around and let you go
When things don't seem to feel right.
I guess we were never meant to be
Although you brought out the best in me
There is no 'we' in your picture perfect world.
Your love is like the Boogie man
Endorsing a used mini van
Swinging from my ceiling fan
Into my dreams, into my mood
I've been dumped, but never chewed.
Author notes
Written February 4th, 2004
In a list
A contest entry
- I'm tired of being what you want me to be by Dragonshadowed.
350 points, ended March 9, 2004, 57 entries
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this is funny I already read it though but I can't say I have it, bor have I heard it, but I bet it sounds dope eh
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addictive, meaningful, and offbeat
I don't know what it is I like about this so much, but I do. You're right when you say your specialty is lyrics. I have a feeling that, when put to music, this is one of those really "catchy" songs, that you can't get out of your head (and wouldn't want to) and find yourself singing subconsciously. I think everyone has been or will be in a situation like this.
"To make me fall the way you did?
Was like dosing me with bad acid,
and ditching me at Disneyland
Yes, it's funny how they'll "tell you so"
Then turn around and let you go
When things don't seem to feel right.
I guess we were never meant to be
Although you brought out the best in me
There is no 'we' in your picture perfect world."
These lines are particularly haunting. This brings back memories, not of being left, but of being the one leaving. He always said I was "too good" for him and he didn't deserve me. He made me his reason for a goal, for a life. He made me out as the reason he was better than he used to be.
Things didn't work out though. After a little while, I realized that I wasn't happy and that it wasn't what I wanted for my life. I felt guilty breaking up with him, because I knew, by being with him, I made him better, but I couldn't live my life, being unhappy to save someone else. A selfish reason, but I think, in the end, if I had've stayed, I would've grown bitter and what made him better, would've made him worse and eventually destroyed him. It hurt him then, but it was the best for both of us.
I imagine this song is how he probably feels toward me. The thing I still wonder is, was it better to have been with me and have that time with me and then have me leave, or did I do more damage than good, by meeting him at all? Is it really better "to have love and lost than not to have loved at all" in some cases?
Anyway, off of my tangent, these lyrics are really addictive and meaningful in an offbeat way. -
The lyrics are kicking, I think I was chewed once by my counter part. For that matter I think I would still let her chew me once more, if I could be in her pressence while she done so. Enjoyed it!
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I clicked this when it was a feature and didn't have time to comment..so I'm back to do so.
Great job
Wish I could think of something better to say, but words fail me at the moment. Wish I could hear someone actually singing it. I've been extremly impressed by what I've read of you so far 
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i missed ethermeal...classic..spunictionary worthy.
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Kick ass job here. I loved it. I can def. hear that in a song.
To make me fall the way you did?
Was like dosing me with bad acid,
and ditching me at Disneyland
I loved that stanza the asbolute best, because I can DEFINITLY relate to them.
This was just awsome, and really got my mind thinking Great job here!!!
~Kristi~ -
a song I'd sing along to! very nice.
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Weird, but funny...the boogie man rocks on.
Edited on Feb 05, 4:49 p.m. because ''. -
Naturally, it's impressive... I didn't do it, my friend and student Josh was filled one Eve by the Holy Roast and Spuna worked and moved through him... like only a spune can, and brought forth it's image through his trembling werewolve paws, and thus further cemented it's existence in the material realm and just not the ETHERMEAL. lol.
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I like it ..the catch line it it made me see thinks i didn't want to..but maybe that's the idea, right? And I don't mean the boogie man ..I know he doesn't exist..at least not as Hollywood defines him. Anyway ..we all know someone like this, if we don't ..then we will, I think it's an inevitable lesson in growing up ..oh yah, you know I'm full of crap right? Hmm ..well, maybe not. Been too long since I read one of yours.
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Nicely done...... all around excellent.
Don -
Yeah, this just about fits my current mood... wondering if I come off as a chewer.
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*laughs* at first, i thought this would be serious. and then u went off with teh boogey man like usual though, very nice...
Nyx... -
Well, he's good.... reminds me of Gorey
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Josh Barbosa drew it, he's my 16 year old lead guitarist.
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whoops... forgot to mention just how friggin awesome your artwork is.... so there
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Yah, Rocks
Impressive art work. Not your typical spuna scrawled scribbles.
And the lyrics...most indeed reflective. Loved the bad acid/Disneyland lines - Yah, that'd toast your brain and you might never been the same again (and they'd all call you wilted Walt in honor of the event).
As for being chewed - that's what you get for dating a woman with teeth.
She musta been the Devil
Hiding in disguise
Cuz I see the red-hot fire
of damnation in your eyes.
All in all, an impressive write. I'd be interested to see how this sounds. -
Real
wait
I think I've slipped
on your memories today
So, I'll just hold
out my hand
and wait on you to take it
Sitting here thinking
how my lack of admission
makes me ugly
hmm... I love it
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Well i must be honest my choder and say that it's not one of the ones i totally loved...fo rthe meaning didn't cut me as deep as your usually scoop your words through my soul but i would like to say you have your usual moments..."Your love is like the Boogie man
Endorsing a used mini van
Swinging from my ceiling fan
Into my dreams, into my mood
I've been dumped, but never chewed." That just really worked and gave this vivid image that only you can bring to a poem...like usual and although it wasn't one of my favorites from you i did like it....i want my walking catfish blues poem...that title worked for me....catfish i wasn't even going that way i was thinking salmon but that one really worked for me too....catfish....i used to watch them swim in at this place in fashion island when i was about 8ish and i swear i was never so hypnotized in my life....i likes the catfish...ok now that i'm insanely off topic i'll just finish up in saying...one i lvoe your work..two it wasn't my favorite...three this picture just makes me feel your hands...don't ask why i'm an artist and i have this hand thing....and four your wording as always choder is brillance in some of the stanza's...good write. -
yes, a catchy and most excellent chorus. i'm singing it all ready. perhaps i'm off the mark but i don't hear acuosic or acoustic here as N.G.R. does but then again, I'm just completely out of it, musically, probably. i did, after all, buy both of your cds. just glad to see you post something.
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hmmmmm is this a new song you have written kinda dark ey but it's good, what kind of beats are you thinking of or shall it be acuosic
the lyrics were cool i think you are doning a great job
spank you
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This is a damn intense write. Speaks volumes.
Just damn. Can't find the words to respect it justfully...
Just wow!!
*stomps
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