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Pleasing Her

My lips kiss yours so so soft and tender,
as our bodies press against one another.
Our hearts come alive with Love's splendor,
this moment we share is meant for you and no other.
Our hands explore each others body so slow,
each touch, each kiss intensifying the affection we do feel.


Enveloped within the pleasures our love does bestow,


these feelings inside we know we can no longer conceal.


Our lips locked within such a heated embrace,


as world outside this room slowly melts away.


Your hand gently touching the side of my face,


as down your body my hands do stray.


Fingers touching the warm flesh, tracing every curve,
as the heat from our bodies entices us so much.
Our passion awakening every nerve,
just from the tenderness of each others touch.
My fingers touch the sensitive petals of your flower,
hearing you moan so softly as you beg me not to stop.
Your hand gently touching my erect tower,
begging to feel me inside you, thrusting nonstop.
Yet I tell you that this moment is just for your pleasure,
as my fingers slide though the gates of your sex.
Making you feel such sensations so intense beyond any measure,
knowing that there is nothing that you could object.
Your body quivering from this sensual act,
as our kisses grow more passionate, so strong.
Knowing the pleasure you feel by the way your body does react,
as you try to make the climax within prolong.
But then you moan so passionate, your head tilted back,
as the climax floods through you like a tidal wave.
My fingers, my lips continuing its loving attack,
giving you the pleasure which your body at that moment does crave.
Then we kiss softly as we hold each other so tight,
knowing that the fires of passion in your heart I did ignite.
But this is more than an act of lust we do share,
it is my way of showing you my love and how much I care.
You lay there with your naked beauty in such leisure,
as I smile knowing that I was able to give you such pleasure.

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  • RikkiRae silver member
    November 25, 2008

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    This is a nice poem that most women would like to read but I felt it was far too verbose. You could have used less words yet created a poem that had far more emotion and power.

    A Partial Critique:
    1st Line: My lips kiss yours, softly, tenderly

    2nd Line: My body pressing against yours

    3rd Line: Awakening our hearts to love's splendour

    4th Line: This line should be deleted, as if it is "meant for you and no other" it should not be printed.

    5th Line: We explore each others body slowly

    6th Line: Each touch, each kiss intensifies our emotions

    I hold to the style of poetry that believe that each line is a separate statement or sentence. As such there is no need for commas or full stops (periods) at the end of each line. Thus it also follows that each line must start with a capital letter.


  • theredcatjazzoflove
    November 25, 2008

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    smoothly written and nice i think you did a very great erotic job on this pieace here it was a pleasure thanks for sharing

  • SurrenderMyHeart
    November 25, 2008
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    very hot, mmm, now i have to go take a cool shower, whew.... glad to know you got some skill