She blooms only in the season of Winter
her beauty as rare as her depictive name.
The youthful face as pale as glistening snow,
but her luscious lips like the petals of that tender rose.
The dresses she wears are all the colours of the season
from gold,green and red, each one nothing like the rest.
Yes, I did give her a rose on Jesus's birthday,
which she held close and made the rose feel ever dear.
But she wilted and slowly melted just like the season
as every petal fell she grew less beautiful and had less to tell.
Her beauty to me will never fade, but just exist in
my now old,faded and distant memories
Author notes
Its coming up to the season and this contest came around so i decided to enter it and tried to look at it from a different light 
A contest entry
- WINTER ROSE by Rhythm Child.
550 points, ended December 2, 2008, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - #39 THEME CONTEST (: by Walk-Free.
700 points, ended January 2, 31 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - prewrite conest by serenity silvermoon.
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Comments
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good work.
Great imagery here, please keep writting..you are very good indeed.
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This was Amazing
I love it! You are a very good poet. This poem reminds me of my first crush. Thank you for writing it I really love it! -
I love the imagery in this write!! and the emotions and who ever this lady is... sounds like a women I might want to be like in the future!! I love this write.. thank you!!
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woww this was beautiful! she sounds like a wonderful woman great write was very descriptive i loved your imagery
amazing poem!!!! =D
huggggglez! <3
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good
your words feel carefully selected and utilized perfectly. This has a good story flow thoughout and as the season ended i felt a sense of loss for some reason. -
good
there were somethings that were wrong colours is actually colors and you need to put are defininitely in between like and the in the fourth line
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"Her beauty to me will never fade, but just exist in
my now old,faded and distant memories"
The last to lines really delivered a punch at the end. It turned the tone of the picture very winter like.
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this is such a beautiful poem
its sad too.
the last two lines summed the whole thing up very well
good job :]
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there is a sense of brokenness in this poem which i liked.
"But she wilted and slowly melted just like the season
as every petal fell she grew less beautiful and had less to tell. "
beautiful lines.
well penned! have a blessed new year!
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This is a great piece of work! Well done! ^.^ Bravo!
♥ Kathraina
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That was beautiful! I really like the first 2 stanza's
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You've written a really nice poem, the words you've used are really effective. Well done.
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beautifully penned
a lovely poem -
i remember this poem
im glad you put it up here
it deserves to be seen
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beautiful i really like it
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Beautiful nd good imagery. Keep writing
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sorry i gotta comment again, i loved this take on what i asked, really giving it your own twist
great write
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great entry
thanks for taking part, wishing you luck would be an insult to your talent so take care
message me for anything
Billy (Rhythm Child)
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