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Hellespont

 

Both robbed of air, we both lie in one ground
Both whom one fire had burnt, one water drowned.

-John Donne

 

 

 

When passion makes a perfect man a Fool
He finds that earthly love, most tragically,
Will not withstand the force that gives him fuel.

Rhapsodic troubadours, quite magically,
Are known to disappear beneath the sea:
The only realm one sups ambrosially.

The world imagines less with its decree
That things should be "like this" or "that" -- "or else!" --
To this the purest love cannot agree.

A knowing poet finds, with weakened pulse,
That he prefers the Hellespont to ground:
A place where he can dream with free impulse.

And so we find the surest lovers drowned,
For love worth having never can be bound.

 

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  • Night Hope gold member
    November 16
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    Your "Rhapsody in Blue" herein is a marvelous example of your fortitude and elegant view of the world, Julien. It is rarely a kind place for such creative souls to dwell in, I know. We would sometimes speak of this, especially when you would threaten to stop your writing. How glad I am that these fine pieces remain, where this often cruel world can see the beauty that was within you, a knowing poet. You were such a fine friend to so many, you know. We think of you fondly and I, for one, always will. And again, what a pleasure to find a remnant of our "lively" exchange upon this page.



  • toomysterious
    November 11
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    Damn what a tragedy that this poet is gone. Pure genius.

  • Night Hope gold member
    November 22, 2008

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    This penning is, of course, exquisite. How could it be otherwise? I read the comments & your responses; this one in particular struck me: "The love we would like to know does exist but is seldom realized in a world filled with mediocrity." How very right you are, my Friend. People have such childish notions of what Love should be, instead of understanding what it is, what it can be. Many seem to go into a relationship fed by false fairytales...she, the charming princess & he, the handsome prince. Then he finds out she snores & she discovers his dirty socks on the floor & all Hell breaks loose. As always, you impress, dear Scribe. I was greatly honored by your note & pleased you'd recalled our "lively conversation". You inspire me, you know.


  • JinSays gold member
    November 22, 2008

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    I cannot breathe.
    damn. this is just amazing.
    Nothing else I could say would come close to how I feel right now.
    jin


  • Luna Tique Fringe
    November 21, 2008

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    i wish i could comment on this, the way it deserves to be commented on

    it winds around my heart


  • Maatkara gold member
    November 21, 2008
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    Great stuff - mythology, history and true poets know
    what is forced is lost.


    • Victory Gin silver member
      November 21, 2008
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      Well, fortunately the light in the tower is still on... still a-swimmin'

      @};--,--


  • Amera gold member
    November 21, 2008

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    Magical! You have taken the Terza Rima and woven it into your own melody. I was captivated from the first line when you introduce the thought of perfection being tainted with passion. This is really strong because that thought carries with the reader throughout the entire poem, right to the conclusion where we're slapped with the image that love as we'd like to know doesn't even exist. You pen this entire philosophy without a hint of hyperbole.

    Love,
    Amera

    • Victory Gin silver member
      November 22, 2008
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      Interesting interpretation. My position is that passion is perfection; that the conditions of society inhibit our ability to possess such perfection. A fool, in the Divine sense, is the archetype of freedom. The love we would like to know does exist but is seldom realized in a world filled with mediocrity. The Fool sees this and rebels -- even at the expense of his own life -- because no compromise will ever fulfill him. "Arete" comes to mind. Thank you for the comment.


  • BlancetNoir gold member
    November 21, 2008

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    This one gets me a little misty...

    I read a lot of poems on a given day lately, so it is rare for me to get emotional to this extent anymore... But it happens... Beautiful... (snuffle)


  • Grunts Girl gold member
    November 21, 2008

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    'to this the purest love cannot agree'
    how i know this from the past!

  • Suzanne Dia
    November 21, 2008

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    can't bind it, it dies when you try.


  • just mercedes gold member
    November 21, 2008

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    Beautiful combination of forms, and such an enigmatic subject line - the poet, being Byron, must drown in his muse, or, being Xerxes, must fail in his quest, and whip the ocean as punishment.

    Also calls up for me the terrible Anzac war of the Dardenelles, where many men were lost to the folly of a few.

    Much to think about - the music of the poetry hides a very strong lesson about love and death. Well done, poet.

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