Who the hell am I?
To that I do not know
I am not something solid
For I surely do not grow
I am not anything wise
This I've been told twice
I'm definitely something old
There's cobwebs in my fold
Who the hell am I?
Why do I even need to know?
Should I ask somebody else
On fear I will be told
I don't really want to know
I'll just go on living as I am
As someone full of passion
And fear of who I am
But Why the Hell am I
Worrying about these things?
Is it because I have tenticals
And am the color green?
Could it be because I started
Out in outerspace?
Nah, it's because I'm all for me
Inside this lonely earth place
Author notes
This was a freewrite piece of mine and I liked it so much, I decided to post it! Let me know what you guys think of it!
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it appears you went in a totally different direction..the 1st two verses were filled with emotion
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Liked it very much, did not like the 3rd verse...your first 2 verse were wonderful
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What did you not like about the 3rd verse? Just trying to revise my poems.
Thanks!
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It is definitely interesting. I couldn't really wrap my head around it but I liked it. I think it has great potential but I can't really see how to change it. If it were my work I probably wouldn't change it but I am stubborn like that. Best of luck to you in all things!
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