The hills are steep, a plummet
to the unknown, much as the fear
of death.
The grassy bottom --
plush,
solid beneath the beauty, beneath
the landscape.
Seen from the distance
of echoed longing, lured
to the edge of the slippery slope.
Sliding down made the colors blend.
Colors --
of calm before the storm;
masqueraded beauty;
the sighs of satisfaction.
Only the bottom bares a thud,
an empty nudge, mockingly cold.
At the bottom,
no way atop the hills.
The depth of the fall,
deep as the sorrow
you knew all along.
A contest entry
- Free Verse and Free Reign To Tell Someone To... by Dalaney.
950 points, ended November 28, 2008, 14 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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What a trip thru emotion. Very good.
Congrad's of the thropy.
Pen on!
Joe
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This is one of my personal favorites
by you. The more you write, the
better you seem to get, so I hope
you will continue on this wonderful
road of poetry. Thank you so much
for you entry. Love, Lane -
Well done with feelings.
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thanks very much, thats nice of you. much love and respect
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very well written and almost dark serene feel(you know i love the dark scenery)
When I read this I think off folks falling flat on face to wake up and want to stand in the mist of life's mud and muck only hoping to make it across the neverending story of trials, or so we think at the story will always be so cruel, we get bits of light to guide the way.
Thanks for bringing this out here
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thanks man, your thoughts on this was much like how i thought when writing it. thats amazing! thanks for coming by, much love
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This was very well written here! Good luck in the contest hon
of calm before the storm;
masqueraded beauty;
the sighs of satisfaction.
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ty very much, i always love it when u stop by. much love
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Why do you fall?
When your heart only wishes to climb!
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Now that's what I call an abyss, the visual of large canyons or deep fall, is incredibly graphic, It's almost scary. well done on the write. Sir William.
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thank u very much for taking a look. always an honor when you come by and grace my page with feedback, good or bad, i love it. Much love and respect.
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