So you spit bible all over dinner,
playing pretend friend with red wine
that’s ok, as long as its blood,
and while you dip a bit of corn flesh
into a soulless cow,
perhaps preach piety and sexual abstinence
to your twelve children.
Yet I’ve seen you
casting not so casual glances
at the honey-dew drops
dangling from some seniors arm,
and how you drip green tainted scripture,
with peek-a-boo prayers
all over their low-cut blouses,
then send the kids to Sunday school
so you can lecture carnal knowledge.
But it’s alright,
you’re only human after all,
and it’s so hard to grow wings
when you’ve got the horn.
Author notes
Quote Prompt:
"Moral indignation is jealousy with a halo."
- H. G. Wells (1866-1946)
A contest entry
- NO GREENS! - A Rounds Contest by Pamela A Lamppa.
1700 points, ended January 20, 23 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Honest Critique Requested
Comments
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Well this just curves the roast down to a gluttonous bone! A fine, and too often seen, example of selfish hypocrisy where rules cast in stone are broken yet all is forgiven if ever mentioned at all.
well done
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lower case "p" in line 6 quick fix!
Good gracious! This is tight and terse and oh so riveted with wry sarcasm. Exceptionally well written to this prompt with expertise and class.
Your last lines sent me into a natural chuckle with those around me shouting "what? what?" Naturally, I had to share.
Another excellent entry to this contest. Well done! Thoroughly enjoyable. ~Pamela
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I loved the imagery in this poem as you call the hypocrites to task. I know you didn't mean this as a humorous poem, but "...sexual abstinence to your twelve children" did make me smile. It is true that we are "only human after all" and if everyone would realize that fact it would be a kinder world. Good luck in this contest. Peace, Liz
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damn.
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right on. just take the wrapper right off that sour tart! best of luck in the contest.
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Excellent Write! Twisted Christian!
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