yesterdays sapling hearts
gently knotted with golden threads
one to another
yours and mine-
gently planted
side by side-
nurtured with sunshine,
and rain drop kisses.
roots taking hold,
heart to heart
clandestine memories
of yesterdays-
a heart don't forget
something like that.
Author notes
Line credit to Tim McGraw
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Wonderful
Very creative and so well done. Thank you for sharing.
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I love this, save for the last lines. It just feels like it doesn't fit with the feel of the rest of the poem. And plus it's already from a song. I would love it if you'd somehow find a way to change it and make it blend with the rest more.
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When I wrote this one, it was for a contest, and I chose to use that song, the host of the contest removed it from same, as they didn't think it fit the contest. I used those lines, because it worked with the rest of the piece, and for the one that it was meant for...
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Beautiful sentiments and the way you equate nature with natural everlasting love is wonderful.
Love,
Amera♥
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This was a great poem, true, but it doesn't really fit the rules. Its true, you took it and changed it, but it was meant to still be the song, and you kinda took away from that.
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Wow~
Oh My what a piece You have penned and I am not familiar with Tim McGraw's music~ You sure took the line and went with it
Beauty for sure~
Love the emotions spilled onto the page~
Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
Best wishes in the contest too
with much love & light~ Desire~*~
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Ooooooooooooh~
Me be back
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