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Pink Cotton Dawn

Deep crimson brick porch
Frames rising sun

Bright rosy clouds
Soft rolling billows
Blue-black sky

Creator's garment

Author notes

This poem is inspired by a picture I took right before breakfast one morning, at my first college, from the east porch of the dining hall.

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  • Dragomiloff
    November 28, 2008

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    I love the sense of awe in this. The descriptions are great - however I feel like they could flow more smoothly if you tweaked it a little. Right now it's kind of got the texture of a haiku, which isn't my favorite, but maybe that was supposed to be part of the poem.


    • Jornada
      November 28, 2008
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      Thanks! "Texture of a haiku"--I'll take it! Really, I try to let the style fit the subject. Wasn't trying for a haiku, exactly, but it seems to work.


  • simplefarmgirl
    November 22, 2008
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    Gorgeous! Awesome metaphor. :-)

  • Dulcimer
    November 21, 2008

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    Yes, I can see it!

    "Creator's garment" is a memorable line. I will think of that next time I view a sunrise or sunset!