dare I to believe
i sense you near me always
image imprinted
corner-sight by owl light
clearly there when you are not
doppelganger
incense and woodsmoke linger
transcending logic
your scent alone souls delight
scintillating second sight
Author notes
Tanka chain.traditional form, very limited or no use of punctuation or capitalization, picture mine
A contest entry
- Pick a word - Write a Poem in 10 LINES or less (D) by The Fun House.
1050 points, ended November 28, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Cool, great stuff!!!
Outstanding!!!
With some great word choices & use that made for a compelling read...
Keep up the good work...
Well done!!!
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This is a lovely piece of poetry. I think a bit of captialization and punctuation would work well here; other than that, I see it all clearly and found it nicely done
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thank you
tanka uses sparse punctuation or capitalization thanks for your kind words, images are fragments playing off each other I think anyway.
punctuation never a strong skill for me, perhaps why \i like the form
thank you again -
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Ah cool. I'm not to familiar with the form myeslf but I will check it out.
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