When words sank deep in awe and pain,
they made an option to the heart and brain.
though future and past do prove the ordain
why then do things fall down in a strain?
the minds would say, 'to hell with it!'
but hearts reject in a spirit of trust.
when minds bagan to reach for it,
the angels were there to clear the dust.
If chances could only make a lie,
I'd make an excliam and be a spy.
Yet till the very day I die,
I'd be in regret that I gave it a try.
If it were a challenge to find the key
to a precious box out there for me,
I claim in now in pride and joy,
God truely knew what meant for me.
What did you think
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oh right ^^ and i could give three applauds but i be poor and out of points ='(
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the peice I meant is the "Its too long One" love it,
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hey pal
well thanks for the comments man, I also read your peice, it makes a good good...
I like the chorus most though...It just got stuck in my head, is the music out yet? lol keep up the talent Bro
Peace
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"the minds would say, 'to hell with it!'"
Nice write =D Never once felt like you forced the
rhyme-- All lines fit together perfectly =]
Ok, this has got to be my favorite stanza. 'specially the last two lines
.."the minds would say, 'to hell with it!'
but hearts reject in a spirit of trust.
when minds bagan to reach for it,
the angels were there to clear the dust."
But its hard to chose a favorite cos the whole damn things good!
Keep it up, huh? You're wicked talented! =D
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Impressive Write
Thought Proving poem captures the essence to life and love.
Our souls seek freedom from the daily agomy we subject it to so our Spirit can fly with peace and ease..
Thank you for sharing
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