The thunder’s booming, darkness falls,
I run outside, the music calls.
The rainstorm’s coming, strong and fast
My coat and boots away I cast.
My loosened hair flows thick and gold,
The wind is roaring, icy-cold.
I bid farewell to setting sun,
Across the lands, I run, I run.
My heart at last is breaking free,
Oh baby can’t you try to see?
Unlock the door, I've found the key,
I feel alive, and so happy!
At last I simply can be me.
The rainstorm’s here, in writhing sky,
I don’t care if out here I die!
I laugh and scream, so wild and free,
Who cares what the world thinks of me?
He didn’t love me back – so what?
I won’t condemn my heart to rot!
I’ll sing away, without a care,
All misery away I'll bear.
The passion pulses, searing strong,
My body, heart, soar right along.
I’m wild, I’m free; hope is in sight,
I dance into the stormy night.
My heart at last is breaking free,
Oh baby can’t you try to see?
Unlock the door, I've found the key,
I feel alive, and so happy!
At last I simply can be me.
In a list
A contest entry
- I just feel crazy Babes! by Lady Michaella.
400 points, ended December 2, 2008, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Let Loose Your Anger by poets whisper.
650 points, ended November 28, 2008, 46 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - pretty much ANYTHING goes. by etoile.
825 points, ended January 11, 43 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Rain by Dragonbabyx3.
2399 points, ended December 23, 2008, 48 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ~~Offer me your love -- I've given u mine~~(Prewrites allowed) by sweet innocence.
550 points, ended May 16, 49 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Beautiful.
What lovely sentiments and feelings ensue from your words. A beautiful story, wonderfully told.
I liked the vision of running carelessly in the storm, with rain beating down, seeking the freedom of a free spirit. Well done Pickle Baby, nicely written, nice flow to the rhyme. Most effective use of title in creating the sheet on which to paint your picture.
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I won't condemn my heart to rot
what a soul soaring line
this is wonderful
it has a lifeblood, a beating heart
bravo
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I love this! Fast-paced, intense, painting a picture in the mind's eye... love it! and the sentiments, refusing to be tied down by despair or someone else's opinion of you... fab! keep writing.
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wow Im tired after reading this it was fast paced from the start and wonderfully written. Great rhyme and rhythm throughout well done...
Cyber Artist
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great write, just incredible.. the flow was lovely and i actually the rhyme
WONDERFULLY PENNED
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It's very positive, and that's wierd for me. When I read most poetry that grips me in it's the exact opposite of positive. Wow, if you didn't have your age listed on here, I would never guess how old you were. I'd guess 18...19...20 , but not 15! Everytime it rains, the thoughts of your brilliant words will run through my mind. Keep writting. You have a talent!
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Oh, I can't tell you the connection I feel for this poem. We had thunderous storms last night, so much so, that I dreamt of trees falling on top the house. I live far off the beaten path in the mountains, and I am so free when I step outside in the pouring rain! There's nothing like the small streams that flood your back yard after a downpour and you can splash across them with your toes squishing in the mud (and I'm 45 I might add) I never grow too old for this kind of pleasure!
Need I say, great poem!!
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second stanza last line would sound better if it were i run run run... very great piece this is th e best one of the night i love it keep up the great work this flows so nice and rhymes very nice keep it up...
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Wow this is a beautiful piece of poetry, and the way its written, it reminded me of me! the way I feel so free in the falling rain.. night and thunderstorms, the free soul.. I loved the way you put it all in this beautiful write.. Do keep writing
Love,
Lonely
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Wow, what a wonderful thing to read! A lot of people don't feel this way and by the time I got finished reading this I felt the same way as well.
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Thanks for such a lovely comment
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the rhyme in this is pretty good, and usually i'm not so fond of rhyme. the imagery is quite beautiful and very descriptive, especially in the second stanza. great poem.
thanks for entering and goodluck
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aww thank you
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Beautifully penned! Beautiful! I lovehow you repeated the last stanza, It really brought those words out into the open. Thankyou for entering my contest, and Good Luck!
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I just read this again,
this really is stunning. I forget what iv read many times, but something told me to come back to this one and read it,its just so beautiful. you create this amazing image in my mind, this new feeling. you seriously are such a tallented writer. and no you are not Samuel Taylor Colleridge, you my dear, are Katie ***** (i wont say ur last name online)
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Thank you
You're such a sweet and special person, your praise means a lot to me! Thanks for being such a great friend xx
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you use some lovely, different words, not regularly used, and this makes for grand reading, and there you are with umpteen comments, I commend you, Take care. Nice read and an obvious nature lover.
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Thank you Tony!
Your kind words have made my day.
Yes, I do love nature very much, and Romantic poetry for that matter
Thanks so much once again, you have a lovely day
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Whoaaa
Oh my gosh, I loved this
Your rhyming was amazing! The piece flowed smoothly and effortlessly. I can't pick out my favorite lines, because I truly loved this whole poem
Incredibly motivational and inspiring! It makes me want to leap to my feet and charge into the rain and dance my troubles away. I love the feeling of not caring who thinks what and if the guys in the past ever really loved me. Because I am free! Haha, sorry, I'm getting carried away, but seriously, this was a beautiful write.
You are an extremely talented writer, keep penning
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Aww thanks so much, haha, you're too sweet
Have a lovely day! x
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thanks so much ocean
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Wow! This was an amazing poem Blue Eyes. You are indeed a gifted writer. We all have to weather the storm sometimes...but to take it head on..that takes courage! A phenomenal write!
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WOW!Folks...THAT is how it is DONE!Never before have I read such soulful and uplifting words!You could heal all the wounded and make whole the hearts of the lost, broken,and forgotten with simply a word.All that is needed is for their focus to be on you!You would make a great motivational speaker for people that have let heartache and the worlds' cruelty cripple them and turn them into introverted recluses!
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Aaw thanks Angel
As could you! Your praise has made my day, so sweet of you!
Really, you are too kind, thanks so very much, I really appreciate it
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The rhyme and flow tripped me up a bit, in the third and the last stanzas, but then, I guess it's supposed to here. (grins) I love the bounce-back-or-get-back-in-the-saddle feel of this, open and willingly fresh. Nicely penned.
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Hehe thanks HomeGrown
Yeah, the third stanza was bugging me a bit, so I just had to change it a little bit. I think it's a bit better now
Thanks again!
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Flawless.
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oo thank you
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well writen. awesome
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Aaw thanks so much!
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Thanks Taz!
you are so good too! no wait. you are so AMAZING!
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omg katie!!! soo good well done
good luck in the contest
ur so good
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Thanks so much, you are too sweet
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Wow, what great write, lovely flow, and very thoughtful... You put alot of emotion into this poem!!!!! Love it, another excellent write!!!! Best wishes in the contest!!!!
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Haha you know it's me
Thanks for the nice wishes Miki. I really tried to express my real feelings, not some fantasy waffle but real real emotion that belongs to me and me alone. This is really how I feel.
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eep! I love this Katie
It is wild and lovely, at the same time follows the rule,
thx for entering and gud luck!
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