We speak in riddles
Metaphors to avoid truth
Indirect words
Meant to keep us
Holy in each other's eyes
We are so weak
Helpless
Fragile
My heart is breakable
But only when you're near
It cracks
With the slightest of pressure
Fissures rupture
What we could only do
If we were stronger
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Word Used: Fragile
By Vampedvixen
A contest entry
- underground. (LOTS OF OPTIONS!) by brandy..
550 points, ended December 12, 2008, 16 entries
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In some places you have goods in others simplistic unoriginality. Stay consistent dont put out what doesnt totally represent you and only you.
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yes ..you are very true and very deep while descrtibing the depth of this life and it is really very bitter yet very factual as well....
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Opening lines are outstanding.
"We speak in riddles
Metaphors to avoid truth"
As if to say this poem would be avoiding the truth, but in this case you are admitting our fragility so no point trying to hide it. I like how you you ended the poem with a sense of hope or a goal. What could we do if we weren't so weak. Great write and good luck.
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Cool poem. It definately fits the title. Good writing style. Metaphors are good. I like the sence of love in the poem. Beautiful write.
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