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Dance With The Angels

While life goes on around me
Through blank eyes I do see
for I am not here
and never shall I be

For I am in another place,
a dream world of my own.
It only holds the two of us
and I値l never be alone

If I should die,
yet you live more,
I値l still come in dreams
and be the one you long for

And when your time is here,
you値l not long anymore.
I値l wait for you, darling
at Heavens door

I値l then be with you love,
for always will I be,
and we will dance with Angels
throughout eternity.





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LIONHEART option 9 sweethearts in heaven
Option 2
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  • eyesofanangel524
    May 4

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    This is a wonderful love poem. Soft and sweet and providing an never ending love. Thank you for entering and best of luck to you. May your ink never cease to flow.


  • suseann
    April 28
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    Now this is warm and comforting to say the least. We should all be so loved and have someone precious waiting on our time of crossing over as this.Wink


  • Anu-Nataraj
    January 26
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    please allso put ur AP name in ur AN

  • Anu-Nataraj
    January 26

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    This is so amazijng !!!
    i got no other owrds which says how much i liked this

    those rhymes are used often by poets..but u used them diferently..that part is amazing !! good luck to u


  • maralisa silver member
    January 13
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    aw a very beautiful poem I loved this good luck in the contestmaralisa


  • daviscth silver member
    January 13
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    And when your time is here,
    you’ll not long anymore.
    I’ll wait for you, darling
    at Heavens door


    I just love the above stanza. Your words are very beautiful and I enjoyed this so much. Thank you for posting and for including your prompt like I asked.


  • forbidden-colour
    January 12

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    Your fourth stanza was my favorite.
    Thank you for entering and good luck!




  • etoile
    January 8

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    your rhyme seemed kind of forced in this piece. but otherwise it was nice, very emotional. i like that. the beginning is my favourite, it's very captivating.

    thanks for entering and goodluck


  • gigglesalot
    January 6
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    aw this was lovely. thanks for entering.


  • trekkergirl
    January 5
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    I like this one... however, personal view here. Should I die before my love I would want them to find someone else... I would not want them to continue on with only my memory, longing for me. I would want them to be happy

    I do like this one though. Thanks for sharing this and thanks for entering it into this contest.


  • KyleBerg gold member
    December 13, 2008

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    Stunning, there is so much rhythmic beauty in this piece, it carried me away with its words. A very sweet message written very expertly -- thank you so much for entering and best of luck

  • suseann
    November 21, 2008

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    Oh,this is absolutely beautiful! A prayer like song woven in tribute lovingly for a soul mate eternal. I'm so...impressed and green with envy too. This is so real in verse,has all the trappings to twist a heart into a cameo match.Bravo Poet!


    • Lionheart
      November 21, 2008
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      Thanks Suseann, You words make me want to write more

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