your hands touch my skin
oh my tratorious body
wishes for your touch
your love i must have
myheart knows otherwise
it remembers the pain you bring
like a shadow, when the sun hides away
Whisper sweey lies
into my willing ears
make tattoes with your hands
on my
neck
legs
face
back
soon my body will be a road map
of where you have been
when you touch me
i am no longer human
i am an object, purely for your lust
i cut myself away, i shall not feel
my mind floats above
watching you just have your fun...
you leave without a word.
leaving me empty and alone
feelng unclean, oh what have i done
your viscious circle begins again
with my pain at the heart
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it's actully not that good, i don't really like it ut whatever.. it's not finished either
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into my willing ears
make tattoes with your hands
on my
neck
legs
face
back
soon my body will be a road map
of where you have been
that was a really good description. pure amazingness.
ps. where does this idiot live so i can kick the shit out of him??
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oh mein Gott!! I think it's great!! I luv it, I giveth you claps
Peace,
Luv,
and Tokio Hotel
~Kiwi
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i like it
just the type of write i love to read.
a few typos,
but very powerful nonetheless!
please finish it, i would love to read the rest
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good one .keep it up.
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nice piece..
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this is really good, really good.
there where a couple errors but those really don't matter. you an awesome poet don't bash yourself
take care.
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personally i think this is an amazing poem.... i really do :]
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i think this is something this is good, i like it, the flow and the feel of the whole poem, keep it flowing my friend. tell me when it is finished
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i think with a few spelling corrections, and maybe a stanza or two in between the poem, this poem is amazing.... you are way too hard on yourself.... youre an amazing poet maddi... trust in yourself, i do.
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