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your name here - -

I will hide behind
the blotches in my veins
& dye my skin
the royal blue
of silence.

there is a smoky
circulation brewing
behind my eyelashes,
where I used
to bury my insecurities
and etch their imprints
onto my optic nerve.

now, I use them
to seal off the chasm
between my chin
and nose,
duck
behind the color
blooming along my cheekbones - - -


and pray for invisibility.




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Prompt: shy

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  • innocence jaded.xx
    January 11

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    & this is why you're on my favorites. (: I absolutely love this, and how you penned it so perfectly with such vivid emotions. Very well written. Welcome to the finalists♥


  • broken-colours
    December 5, 2008

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    What a poem you've created from the prompt! That was fantastic. and dark blue really does make me think of total silence. I loved it.


  • Never Fall in Love
    November 23, 2008
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    love the title. Thing is, I always thought silence was electric blue. Or any other noisy color.


  • storiesuntold gold member
    November 23, 2008

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    A very in depth write here

    If we could see ourselves our own reflection from behind the eyelids would our mind try to fix it or would it back away . This write brings to my mind someone who through this age of the young followed the group and in time found their was friendship as long as you brought forth the candy for all to share .I have a nephew who has been hooked on cocain for years and once I asked him this question and he thought for a moment and replied often when endulging in drugs the sights seen behind the scenes often arent our own its a delusion forced to be understood only by the user .
    Good write here it makes one think of how each mind processes the poem according to their own life


  • lowercase prelude gold member
    November 21, 2008

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    excellent, this was really good

    my favorite part was stanza 2:

    "there is a smoky
    circulation brewing
    behind my eyelashes,
    where I used
    to bury my insecurities
    and etch their imprints
    onto my optic nerve."

  • emoskater15
    November 21, 2008
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    hey

    im kurtis and that was really good

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