Struggling through the mist,
I search for a sign of light,
My body covered in
scars and bruises,
rewards of the path behind.
Harbingers of self pity and hate,
gather around, like scavengers
over rotting flesh.
Through the darkness I continue,
I walk the broken path forward.
Never looking back only
moving towards, a new breath of life.
I struggle through the mist,
but, I can’t stop,
I can only move forward.
Author notes
image is: Man in the mist by *heatherspettals (deviantART)
I hope this is what you are looking for, lately this is how i have been feeling.
A contest entry
- your black & white needs a little bit of red... by Immortal Obscurity.
1750 points, ended November 26, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This poem deffinately has alot of meaning..... One shouldn't dwell on the bad that happens, but focus on the good that could happen..... Look for a brighter tomorrow instead of a dull and sad day ahead
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This poem is well written, and holds a truth in it. Also the take on the prompt is good, and I like the outcome of it all.
Take care
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AWESOME
This is a good poem Aaron, keep up the good work -
Truly a very very dark poem but even then a small glimmer of hope
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Good, there is acknowledgement of pain but movement forward. Strong images and a sense of alienation, and the final line gives hope.
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Wow!
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Indeed, this is deep and emotional; you have portrayed a valiant struggle, as overcoming self-harm is, and I applaud you for including a sense of empowerment. Sometimes, all we can do is laugh in the face of our pain and soldier onward.
I don't know how much of this is personal, if any at all, but you have done a wonderful job here. Thanks so much for entering!
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The emotions depicted are /amazing./
You obviously know how to take something and make it your own. Your own words enters another's mind and you make them think what you want them to. And that's just amazing. -
Awesome write, love the emotions here hun, moving forward is the only way to go! Love the line 'rewards of the path behind'. Good luck in the contest
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Beautiful! This is most definatley one of my favs! I relate so much to this.
The way you wrote it keeps the reader interested and involved.
Very Very Awesome!
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