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Juliet...

Was it really that hard?
Did you really need to go to those extremes?

[What decievery, Juliet.
Am I really that....
detestable?]

I defended you, Juliet.

[He killed your cousin.
Did you know that, Juliet?
Your cousin was angry, too.
Now Romeo murdered me.]

But life works in strange ways.
I loved you, Juliet.

[I did.
Really.
Truly.]

I see now...

Was it the thrill, Juliet?
The defiance?
The desire to prove something -
anything?

[Typical teens.]

But "true love" -
or forbidden love -
Makes for good stories.

[So I died -
Utterly,
Utterly
Alone.]

History morphs into unrecognizable
lies
(or truths?)
as well, Juliet.

... And so two starry eyed lovers
outwitted the interference
called Paris.

[I laugh.
Bitterly.]

It's tragic, isn't it?

[But what about me?
I loved you too, Juliet.
Did you know that?
Did you, Juliet?]

History calls it tragic.

[How I wish I could change it.
Maybe then I'd be worthy of your...
tainted love.]

Life calls it tragic.

[He murdered me, Juliet.
Do you care?
Do you, my sweet,
sweet Juliet?]



But me?



[I call my story...
tragic.]

Author notes

Ack. >.< That didn't really turn out how I wanted it to.

Anyway, it's from Paris's POV. Incase people were confused.

For the contest - Butterflies OR caterpillars. I don't really care.

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Comments

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  • HereComesTheSun
    February 1, 2009

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    AWSOME work! it really was pretty darn good and i would of never thought of doing it that way
    great job
    and than you so much for entering


    • x-sweet-sunshine-x
      February 1, 2009
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      Thanks for complimenting I've always sympathized with Paris.

      Thank you for hosting the contest!


  • Snow White Queen
    December 21, 2008

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    Dude I love it! Its amazing! Its like in Twilight no one cares about Jacob. Jacob/Paris Paris/Jacob???
    Poor guys.


    • x-sweet-sunshine-x
      December 21, 2008
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      Thanks for the comment Jacob is AWESOME. Haha, I always love those characters. I feel like them all to often

      I'll have to read some of your poems

      -Paradox


  • Wydra
    November 29, 2008

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    beautiful

    its really interesting how you look at the outsiders pov instead of romeo or juliet. very original and creative. the fresh outlook gives the story a sharp edge and makes juliet seem foolish and superficial.


    • x-sweet-sunshine-x
      December 21, 2008
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      Thanks for your comment... I know it's about one month late. Oh well.

      I've never had much patience for Juliet, and I've always liked the outsider... Hehe. In other words, I Iike to tear apart classics

      -Paradox


  • my02U
    November 23, 2008

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    ha ha! luv ya, moronic ox - er, i mean paradOXical oxyMORON... lol. this is so you, yes, yes, very 3D (thanks sis) very nice, a very beautiful person must have edited this... now who could that have been... lol.

    luv,
    lovey


  • liduen silver member
    November 22, 2008
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    It's really good and I don't care what you say! So deal with it!!!! *laughs evilly*

    I really like the end bit. The (whatcha-ma-callsists?) [ ] things were cool, they added a three demensional (can poems be 3D?) depth to the poem.

    Good luck in the contest!

    (wow...is my mind messed up right now...that comment makes no sense )

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