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Turn Around

Turn around
Cause I have been waiting
For you to see
What has been infront of you
For as long as I can remember

Open your eyes boy
I'm here for the taking
And I have been for so long
You're waiting for love to hit you
And so I'm winding up for the punch

"Bestfriend" isn't my favorite title
Because what we have is so much more
And I know if you just looked around
You would relize how invisable I have been
Cause now I'm doing everything I can to get you to see

This is me and I know
That you have never really given me a thought
But let me roam through your dreams
And I'll be the topic of every senetence
That leaves your lips




Author notes

old poem

is it creepy?

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
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  • meggie94x
    November 21, 2008
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    whoa sounds familiar to a situation of mine...lol

    damn hahaha


  • Jd17
    November 21, 2008

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    old but good. I would suggest you adding some of your new style and reinvent the poem. Its got the potential to be one of your best


  • MusicIsMyLifeline
    November 20, 2008
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    old? i see.
    some spelling mistakes but watevs.
    not creepy. lolz