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Bad Habit, my Muse

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She came strolling up the mountain
carrying flowers in her basket.
Barefoot again, and I've told her..
dress is torn, frayed along the edges

but she's smiling..
I'm so happy to see her..
She's sunshine draped in a cloud.  

 

Who are those flowers for?

Are those for me, my love?

Nobody but the moon.

He's had a hard night, don't you know?
Waited for me by the well,
and I never showed.

 

(She never showed. . .)

 

I fell asleep under a cloud.
Half past midnight.
my sandals I left beneath
the rose bushes?

Now they're all wet. . .
I don't think they'll fit anymore.

She saunters off. . .
dress melts away, she just smiles.
A sloppy mess,with

kissable lips..

I don't know how many times I've told her..
In times of hope, and redemption,
she's my favorite bad habit.

 

I hope she knows how much I love her.
But she keeps courting the moon.
Makes me want to cry..

 

A wicked gleam lights her eyes,
fend off the world, underneath my wing..
Fly with me, my love..
I'll dry your tears,
make your dreams come true..


She doesn't care, to her,

I'm just her shameful past.

And ohmy, how she loves to get her feet dirty!

 

She just smiles and turns away. . .

 

I love it when she does that.

Nothing but a bad habit, I tell myself. . .

 

Nothing but a bad habit. . .

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Prompt:
I believe that imagination is stronger than knowledge -- myth is more potent than history -- dreams are more powerful than facts -- hope always triumphs over experience -- laughter is the cure for grief -- love is stronger than death.
-Robert Fulghum, The Storyteller's Creed


I penned part of this a while back, and never knew what to do with it.
This write however is fresh. and I hope you like it.
This poem is about my muse, and my relationship with her. . .

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  • penman gold member
    December 4, 2008
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    Wonderful

    Oh my what a great take on the prompt. So very well done. Congratulations on the honorable mention.


  • Sandygram
    December 1, 2008

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    I love the story you wove with your words. Sensual and soft. Simply beautiful! Thank you for entering my contest and best of luck. Your poem was a pleasure to read this morning. Take care, Sandy


  • storiesuntold gold member
    November 27, 2008

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    Beautiful

        I have found this same love with a man I have visioned and loved from my childhood dreams then as a teen found this dream before me and we married now for 39 years and I still feel this same feelings when he is near and oh the excitment of the near kiss a game we play at times makes the heart jump with excitment . I love your poem here


  • Swan song gold member
    November 27, 2008
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    I like your style of writing it is sooo very refreshing


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 25, 2008

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    all i can do is just smile at this poem wonderfully done with such creative juices, i know i enjoyed it, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • Blue Rew silver member
    November 22, 2008

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    Excellent through and through...
    I just love the way I was able to melt into
    this, identify. Blue seems to fit your muse too,
    that with a bit of grit on the side! Blue

    PS-Slight typo? Makes my want to cry (me)


  • DolceVito gold member
    November 21, 2008

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    Love it

    I just love this talk with the muse write(my muse moves in mysterious ways).


  • Paloszoo gold member
    November 21, 2008

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    Fantasic tale that leaves me wondering... I really enjoyed this immensely! Imagery is really luscious! Good luck in the contest!


  • Swangrnv gold member
    November 21, 2008

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    so she's a bad habit huh?

    makes me wonder about mine! I LOVE THIS, wonderful, image-laden piece of magic..this just what one needs to feel inspired

  • dx d by me
    November 21, 2008

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    You are a wonderful story teller! And your muse seems to be a bit ungovernable, and strong willed, and perhaps a little wontan (which as far as muses go is alright with me). Nice write Geo.

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