I hate you for doing this
I want you to die
I want to kill myself
And I don’t know why
How do you torture me
Give me emotions I feel
Why are you doing this
You’re not even real
Your just a dream
A guy I made up
I was in love with you
Now I don’t give a fuck
You think you can trap me
With everything you do
Your velvet soft voice
That says “I love you”
Your beautiful green eyes
That stare me down
Your perfect half smile
That’s never a frown
Your jet-black locks
I run my hands through
Your pale white skin
I love to kiss too
You make tears come
Even if you don’t try
I look at your face
And then I ask why
I can’t fall to my knees
Every time I’m mad
Because then I start crying
And my heart gets sad
Please kill me now
So I can dream forever
Because in my dreams
We are truly together
~Kay~
Author notes
how many about him is this?
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this was such a beautiful write so tragic and painful. I really enjoyed reading this poem you did a great job. thank you for entering
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Wow, this is amazing. Your words are so powerful and strong. I can feel your pain and anger. I am so sorry you feel this way and have had to go through this.
The flow and rhymn here is perfect. Nothing feels forced and it just runs so smoothly,
You have done a fantastic job here. Thank you for entering my contest, and if you ever need to talk i am here for you.
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more anger then sadness. 5
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great rhyme and flow! great piece indeed. thanks so much for your entry
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You are very talented. Your style reminds me of how I write. Your poems flow beautifully.
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There are alot of strong emotions in this poem and I think that you've really displayed alot of pain which is very brave of you. I could feel the emotion and there was a nice rhythm to this. The rhyming was nice and consistent and some of the lines were very well crafted.
"Your beautiful green eyes
That stare me down
Your perfect half smile
That’s never a frown"
This was sweet, and reminded me of a guy I used to know.
Thanks for entering this into my contest.
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Dark , Deep, Passionate and Very strong .. .. I didn't expect it would end with hope, but it did , and it was nice..Thanks for sharing, Good Luck!
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wow....i love this. Your a grand writer.
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deep, everything that life is sit here, our expectations are raisied so high only to be beaten down again and again.
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Aww hun this is a very emotional poem and extremly well written.
kepe it up!
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