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and you love me...

i dreamt last night again of you
as i passed through
my eyes in glows
my soul in blows
secretly took a glance
swift and shy
my heart in cry
to you my romance

and my eyes met yours
in perfect lures
with sparkels and glows
with love and vows
i felt a heat of burn
fire in the urn
of my lonly heart...

i dreamt last night, like everynight
of you my eyes my sight
wished to feel your hand
take me to your beatiful  land
of roses and spring
oceans and seas
grant me its lease
forever , my king

and my eyes met yours
in perfect lures
love they spoke
thirstysouls woke
destiny that  mock
inspite of the flock
we were two apart...


i dreamt last night again of you
a simple dream so true
and  i woke  sad
nor caresses nor kisses i had
even in my dreams
same steady streams
i ignored you
and passed through
you ignored me
and passed through

i love you
and
you love me...


but
life does not








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  • Abstract Image
    April 20

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    Beautiful poem and i can so relate. Ever since i met the eye of my affection he's been in a lot of my dreams and they range from soothing cuddle to hard core erotic which kinda freaks me out to tell u the truth. This is however sad and i hope ur dreams become reality like mine seldom do...GL


  • Ahkam silver member
    November 20, 2008

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    Very Sweet Thought

    Miss Dreamer, realy very nice and sweet dream.Ah then, as usual, there is a twist of thought, a contrast between dream and life, here you see,
    i ignored you
    and passed through
    you ignored me
    and passed through
    and still another scroll,
    i love you
    and
    you love me...
    very sweet stream of thought, keep writing, keep sharing.


  • rhondasail
    November 20, 2008

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    There is an innocence in your writing that plays lightly throughout. The rhyme within and at the end of lines mixes smoothly in your usage, which gives a flavor to your imagery...it also is indicative that English is not your native tongue, but your instincts with the phraseology is graceful and true. I like this one for the dreaminess of it which is well contrasted against the waking reality of the last stanza...It feels like a crush...you fantasize over them at night but in the harsh light of day, they do not even see you ...well done, and I agree with Rick before me...so sad an ending...Life is...what it is...Be well and blessed, now and always, Rhonda


  • Endeavor gold member
    November 20, 2008

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    Very Good


    i dreamt last night, like everynight
    of you my eyes my sight
    wished to feel your hand
    take me to your beatiful land

    Love the yearning in this
    I write of this often
    The ending was so sad

    Well said my friend

    Rick

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