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true love's declaration

 

When my bones collapse,

that's when I'll give up.

Whenever my heart stops beating,

that's when my pursuit will end.

 

May I not stray from this love.

Do not let me become commitment's coward

and however long it takes to hold on

when storms come,

 

may I outlast the wind and waves.

 

May my faithfulness be evident

in every thing I do.

No treasure other than you needs to be my focus.

In all my days and nights, let my prayer be that

I bring joy to you.

Let my hand depart from my body

if it's holding on to anyone but you.

 

In love and staying true

may I never fall away.

To not become a statistic to be quoted

or to fall in line with alll the rest,

 

may I be the heartbeat in your chest.

 

The sunrise and sunset every morning,

may I awaken any joy you haven't found

and smile you've never shown.

 

Bring you and me closer to that day

when love is sealed with forever's words,

the mark of a lifetime -

 

"'Til death do you part".

 

Author notes

In every thing I do, my love, my it be honorable to our relationship and to you. May I do nothing to compromise our love. I'd be a fool to do so.

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  • justgot2loveme
    December 7, 2008

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    Your words of promises to love already showes that they come from deep within your heart. Your poem is very beautiful.
    Thanks for sharing and good luck.

    Justgot2loveme


  • pukingrainbows
    November 21, 2008

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    Wow this is honest to god amazing this is what people want to hear about love I'm not going to lie i called my boyfriend after I read this and I'm sure if your girlfriend makes you feel like i did when i finished reading this then you two should be togethor . Bloody good wright (*0_0*)
    -Monica


    • lowercase prelude gold member
      November 21, 2008
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      Thank you

      I actually wrote this because of her. This is the way I feel about our relationship. I want to be completely dedicated to what we have. I don't want to stray, I want our love to be strong and of value.

      So, that's why I wrote this, was to convey that thought.

  • readjusturfocus
    November 20, 2008
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    deep

    makes me think about things
    well love in such a broad aspect


  • Re-invention silver member
    November 20, 2008

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    wow... nicely done// this is beautiful and heartfelt... i love it! yay!


  • Stevie17Marie
    November 20, 2008

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    excellent piece =] this is really good I love it cause it is so true
    my favorite
    "May my faithfulness be evident

    in every thing I do.

    No treasure other than you needs to be my focus.

    In all my days and nights, let my prayer be that

    I bring joy to you.

    Let my hand depart from my body

    if it's holding on to anyone but you.
    " and "Bring you and me closer to that day

    when love is sealed with forever's words,

    the mark of a lifetime -



    "'Til death do you part".
    " the ending almost made me cry
    keep up the greath work =]


    Stevi


  • 2lullabyhaven
    November 20, 2008

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    I am in love with this piece...so in love...thanks for sharing it, so full of quaint emotional zest; Your notes are also greatlol

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