Trying to make the best out of everything
But he's making me lose my soul over it
I know that I love him
but I question myself
whether or not
I'm in love with him anymore
It's so boring to talk to him
same things everyday
he's changed so much
and so have I
I don't want to lose him
but there's nothing
I can do
I've tried my best
to make this work
It seems he's happy
where he is
away from me
but with the bitch from hell
I've closed my mouth many times
I know that he's not trying hard enough
I've been thinking a lot lately
Why should I waste my time on him
He's been away off and on for two months now
This time he will come back
but not the same
If i stink don't be afraid to tell me.
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Been there myself
Being married dor 38 years now there were many times my husband was just shut off reading books oe watching tv in his own little world never heard a word I said . But the funny thing was when we would have company he was a real chatty sally for sure . What goes through mens minds bafflel me so I started talking to everyone but him totally ignored him and when he mentioned it to me I told him why is it everyone else finds us so interesting to talk to us but us . Its time we listened to one another how about it we just might enjoy it if we tried
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heartfelt
well this is what love is about sometimes,its not always roses and romance.its this that makes you appreciate the other,its this side that makes true love much more beautiful.this is awesome,it came from the heart thats what matters to me the most cause the heart doesn't lie we just don't listen to its truth sometimes.
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the underlying theme is universal ... how people alter during a relationship and the piece explores this quite well.
however, the write can be a little tighter ... it feels like a diary entry and just sprawls all over the page.
great potential and thanks for the write.
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Outstanding
I liked how you explored your feelings in this poem looking at the whole concept of change -how people change over time almost without you noticing until you wonder are they the same person you fell in love with. This is full of soul-searching, the love is real but doubt is there too. This is an emotional poem and I admired your honesty, the way you try to seek the truth.
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You simply spill you brains and heart out;
I believe it’s very effective, the way you just express your story, and I personally could relate to it, in fact am going through the same dilemma… why do I try too hard to make it work when I know deep inside me that it just won’t? To defy fate? God? Or am I simply living in denial?
Your poem and I quote, can’t “stink”... because it shares genuine pain, hope, strength even though fragile its profoundly prevailing, because within you, you already know the answers to you questions, you already know what to do.
Don’t be afraid to follow your guts, to follow the truth.
It’ll hurt, oh yes it will... (But aren’t you already hurting?)
You’ll move on. Now better than later.
I’m really emotionally attached to your poem which makes me not eligible for any critical feedback.
At least for right now.
Thank you for sharing Hun, a heartfelt piece, truly!
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Thanks the bitch from hell is his mother.
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LOL - ouch !!!!
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she's crazy. He don't even see it.
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