It hurts me to see the finest china today,
ignored and abused in so many ways.
When the same people protects their material things ,
leaving their children alone in silent screams.
You may find this poem upsetting today ,
but may I ask you where your finest china is I pray .
That it is nurtured and loved for all to see,
for we are watching and yes we see their needs .
There is not one piece of china in the whole wide world ,
equivalent of a child a boy or a girl .
Brought into this world by mankind so often blind,
Today look about you is it yours or mine .
It shouldn't matter for the child so needs us so ,
it is the purest of all pure'er than even gold.
For it is our future have you blessed it this day,
you see for God wont have it any other way.
We have gone to loving neighbors to hate in our time,
so many of our fine china lost along the line .
Look into their eyes and your future you shall see,
they are the building blocks formed by you and me.
Author notes
We are the leaders so what have we done look upon your daughters and sons tell me why they are so lost and riddled with drugs today when did you let love go astray
A contest entry
- Photo Prompt by OldBear34.
1200 points, ended December 5, 2008, 9 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - I Want The Best of Pre Writes by theredcatjazzoflove.
700 points, ended November 25, 2008, 29 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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excellent lines of conviction you share in this poem.
well done.
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GOSH I LOVE THIS, ESPECIALLY THE COMPARRISON WITH CHINA, NICELY PENNED
THANKYOU
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Yes, what you say is so true. What have we done? Gosh, I think of mine and can't fathom leaving those true jewels to themselves. What gifts, huh? This is a very moving piece to me...immediately, I thought of my own (as would many I would suppose) and nodded in silent agreement (and a bit of tripidation too). Thank you for the prick. Such a beautiful reminder. Congrats on the trophies.
AsIThink...
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This is Fantastic!
This is absolutely remarkable,
and so true.
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Woot!!
Congratulations on Your Trophy win!
-Throws confetti-
Woooooooooo Hoooooooooooo
Had to come back
Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet One
Best wishes too
with much love & light~ Desire~*~
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Congrats on winning the bronze with this awesome poem Patty.
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i love it love it you are absolutely right this was a pleasure reading this good luck to you in the contest
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i wish that your poetry could be shown to even more people. they have so much to learn through your teachings, your views, and lessons. i love this piece and your comparison of children to china. it is true that children are fragile , even emotionally and can break as fine porcelain can. EXCELLENT!
becca
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Precious~
Oh My this is a Beauty of a piece and Love Your reference to china and how fragile children are
It's been awhile since I have been to Your front porch but elated to be back and reading Your work again~
It pains me to read of abuse- for some reason I am reminded of how some parents are forced to keep children they don't want- because the system has cracks in its child protection procedures-processes I am reminded of how resentment grows like a cancer- there are so many other families who would Love to take these jewels in their homes- but sadly another china is broken
Wonderful weaving of words spoken to touch the Heart~
Thank You for sharing Your Heart and Spirit~
Many blessings to You in all You do Sweet Soul
Best wishes in the contest too
with much love & light~ Desire~*~
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As always, a touching, heartfelt write. It's amazing how we lose perspective sometimes. Best of luck in the contest with this piece.
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Wow. This is really moving. Powerfully written! Your analogy is exellent, and I can relate well to this piece. Good luck in the contest!
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This is such a powerful write, using China is a great way of expressing children .
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Good Contrast
Using China as the metaphor for material possessions and contrasting the value we give them with the value of our children is nicely done. Your flow draws one away from your rhyme, which, while good, is hardly noticed. Good Write!
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How true!!! I know what you mean about our children being "fine china" They are truly more precious than anything on this earth. I am pleased that my boys came out so well, even though they had a hard life. They are truly my blessing each and every day!
Best of luck in this contest!
and love
Nyetta
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