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Eternal is My Love

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i; Life


Drowned within the deep love of affection
The certainty of heart-felt pledged inside,
Too deep and which without a full protection
Allows these depths to simplify what died.

Attentions, that complain of these ordeals
Which ill divide what knowing you has caused
I'm in between frustrations', and it feels
My breathing's stopped or even worse it paused.

I see yet not an eye moves which distracts,
From loving what it is explaining why's
That dying needs to be when verse attracts,
Adoring you without those sad goodbye's.

Perhaps, my words will cherish you enough,
Permit me if you will, that love shall last,
As long as life itself revolves this stuff,
Romance has played, eternal, not surpassed.

ii; Death

Crowned beyond confines to this disclosure,
As seen as only high above can please
More soothing than a sigh to heal exposure
Making clean the wounds in love's appease.

I feel, yet without source directly sense,
The inhibitions greatly known achieve
You knowing I was dead, but commonsense
Would eagerly prestige it make-believe.

From all the wise decisions I have made,
Incredibly the journey I pretend,
To take, and this with you, I serenade
That many words shall mean this not the end.

Dimensions, that explicit love has owned
Are reasonable to say, "I truly will",
Divide my love which once before postponed
Enchantments to eternity we seal.

 

 

There is a Hindi Translation.

 

 

 

Author notes

I believe that imagination is stronger than knowledge -- myth is more potent than history -- dreams are more powerful than facts -- hope always triumphs over experience -- laughter is the cure for grief -- love is stronger than death.
-Robert Fulghum, The Storyteller's Creed

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  • chiefmac
    December 1, 2008

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    Nicely penned, well deserves Gold trophy. The rhyme tie the stanza together wonderfully. The movement is quick for the reader as the tempo builds. Flow is smooth


  • Sandygram
    December 1, 2008

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    You have pened a beautiful and heartfelt poem. Wonderful take on the picture. Love the contrast between life and death. Thank you for entering my contest and best of luck. Your poem was a pleasure to read this morning. Take care, Sandy


  • Amera gold member
    November 20, 2008

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    Beautiful in life and death for love tranversed both of them. This sonnet will go on well after we're gone.

    Love,
    Amera♥