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Her Shell

Worn… and laced between her crooked fingers,
are ever present beads of faith and hope.
In despair her wretched body lingers,
she’s loosing precious memories to cope.

Across her lap is spread the quilt of age,
her shoulders bear the shawl many trials.
The quill of life has filled her every page,
inscribing gospel of her trodden miles.

My grandma sits alone most every day,
with eyes too weak to even read a book.
It’s been this way since grandpa passed away,
it breaks my heart and I can’t bear to look.

I wish that there was someone I could blame,
for she no longer recollects my name.

 

 

 

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  • Aussie Gypsy gold member
    December 12, 2008

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    It makes me sad as I think of my own grandmother who thought I was a nurse in the last days of her life. It is such a tragedy to see someone once so vibrant lead a life (if one can call it that) after such wonderful memories. I feel this one in my heart. As do you I know. Best to you and Congratulations to you on your trophy


  • echo-ink
    December 10, 2008

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    WOW-ZERS

    Amera, Heart-wretching, my goodness, I cried and cried when I read this.

    'sssssssssssss for you.

    Love you,
    Bell,


  • Arkbear gold member
    December 7, 2008
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    Wow.....a pondering Sonnet you have penned, and with humility you spoke of the wonders of a sad reality ~

     

    Good to see a Silver sitting there.....I would expect no less from this poetic beauty.......your Tone has made me wonder in my mind.......this is how you get my attention......indeed a piece to think about after I turn the page ~

     

    Bless you,

     

    Bear ~


  • nordicsky silver member
    November 21, 2008

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    This is such a sad subject, the physical and mental decline of a much-loved human being. That fate should do this to us, just because we dare to live too long, seems unkind and arbitrary. We would not choose to remember them this way.

    Thanks for posting such a meaningful poem.
    Regards, Peter


  • Swan song gold member
    November 20, 2008

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    This is simply a sad reality of life for so many
    older people. Your poem is touching and brings out something deep and heartfelt


  • Pure Thought silver member
    November 20, 2008

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    Poem excellent

    But this one tears my heart out. Aging and departing is quite often more difficult on the ones left behind.


  • HaleyMary
    November 20, 2008

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    Powerful write, Amera. That ending was so sad. I felt I could relate to it, as I had a great aunt who passed on about a year ago whose mind was going on her since around 2003 and it was always hard for her to remember people's names. Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest.


  • Haygood gold member
    November 20, 2008
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    Very touching.

    I watched my dad go through it. His day consisted
    of one...breath...at...a...time. I was moved.


  • Paloszoo gold member
    November 20, 2008

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    Wow. This is..........beyond words. It reminds me a bit of the sonnet I recently wrote about my mother. Your words are so very touching and moving. It means so, so much to me that you entered my contest and wrote for me. Thank you


  • artis
    November 20, 2008

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    I know how it feels, I have walked in your shoes,.....

    My grandma sat
    in her wheeled chair
    sentenced to life
    a prisoner there
    gazing with a 3 mile stare
    through cataracts
    that blurred the glare
    far back to someplace
    who knows where??
    ~
    she never spoke
    clots stole her tongue
    in one quick stroke
    her voice fell dumb
    but she could grunt
    though sounds were few
    you'd swear she'd grunted
    "I love you."
    ~
    Death came to claim
    her frail, worn flesh
    perfumed...embalmed
    she smelt so fresh
    I left a kiss
    on her cold face
    I sang in tears,
    "Amazing Grace."
    ~
    We buried her
    in hollowed ground
    and left her where
    there is no sound
    at home at last
    with other folks
    who all were felled
    by death's quick strokes
    they all had words
    fate left unspoke
    ~
    Yet now I'm sure
    she walks and sings
    and talks about
    most everything
    to loved ones who've
    gone on before
    on the banks of heaven's
    golden shores
    ~
    some poor old soul
    has claimed her chair
    "But, God I miss her
    sitting there!"
    ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ARtis


    Author's Questions/Comments
    Dear Lord,
    You made this
    dear mother grand,
    and then you
    made her great,
    you gave her a
    life full of love
    and let her
    leave it late
    now touch her with
    your healing hands
    and let her walk
    your promise lands,
    until such time
    when her children
    and thier kids
    children gather round,
    and laugh again
    with her and dance,
    in Heaven's holy
    happenstance,
    where all who love
    as much as she,
    will spend
    joyous eternities.
    Amen

    my heart goes out to you.~~~Artis

    • echo-ink
      December 10, 2008
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      Your comment poem was wonderful.
      God bless
      Bell


    • Amera gold member
      November 20, 2008
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      Oh my! What a massive and wonderful comment
      Thank you


  • poeticweaver gold member
    November 20, 2008

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    Very heart-moving!

    But once again you captured the emotions over-flowing within so very well. I like how you always do this teach. Much love, and all the best to you and yours!

    -Timothy


  • Swangrnv gold member
    November 20, 2008

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    oh man..

    this is very sad. I saw this happen right before my eyes with a family member and it's very heartbreaking to see someone once so vibrant and full of life and spirit turn into a shell of their former self. a painful piece to read, but you wrote it well my friend.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    November 20, 2008

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    Heart rippingly sad, delicious rhyme and meter tied to great sad tale telling.

    A sonnet used with such tenderness, is worth its weght in bright green gemstones.


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    November 20, 2008

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    it is in the sadness of this poem that you see the beauty of this poem, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest


  • StarEyes
    November 20, 2008

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    Sis,

    This is heart-wrenching. I know how you feel, I have seen that happen with many. It is a sad thing to watch, especially to those we love.

    Great job sharing your feelings with us on this one.

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    November 20, 2008

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    This is so sad and heart-breaking. I have been through this as well and it is not at all easy to deal with. My blessings to you and yours.

    A great poem expressing your heart.


    Az


  • Wandika gold member
    November 20, 2008

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    So very sad

    Excellent Sonnet.

    I have seen and experienced that of which you write. My Mother in law is getting that way now, my father is just getting worn out. I am too.

    Jim

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