~ I was feeling the great heckler ...
taunting me, torturing me in my sorrow;
making me sorely depressed, angry, uncertain;
lost ... and-alone, and the lot; towards my
existence, and I-still-do-not-know ... nor
care when, or from whence it came, nor
how-through my bewilderment it still
remained to form, because I am so
overjoyed ... today ...that I came
out non disheartened and for
the better thanking God for
delivering me from the spirit,
of this painful utterance,
awakened-from-the-
seat-of-my-soul ...
because a new
freedom has
come for
me; and-found-me-well ... and so
very hopeful again, and grateful; to
be alive; standing-up ... boldly ... and
shouting hallelujah ... on-the-other-side. ~
Author notes
"Life"
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I thought well, and hard before placing this in the "Carers" contest ...
"I chose Option #4"
Why???? Because I do ...
I do care and try to consider all as a friend, and when disheartened and living in doubt about this ...
I move to still try ... as do those I am sure that have the goodness to enter this contest. Whatever their given situation that may have presented itself in their efforts, to care ...
Also ...
because-I-expect-nothing-from-this ... I only will to try and help,
and because with eyes wide shut;- and now opened, I have now received all that I prayed for, at least for myself, which is everything!
To explain ...
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I wrote this on November 20th 2008.
The night before, I lay amid the throws of a severe depression. I never know what will come of my writings when I am like this, but I hope and pray ... this will inspire someone else.
To-hold on ...
To keep caring, for themselves, for another, for the world, for another's world ...
Peace to you my friend and thank you for your compassion, and faithfulness and love, and for reaching out, and for reading ...
~ The reason that there are Hyphens "so many of them") is because I have a computer that speaks them with a faster and slower and higher and lower pitch of voice, giving a certain kind of ebb-and-flow to the work with a softer more fervent and realistic and consistent tone, when I use the hyphens and other punctuation in the certain places that I do, when in telling it what to do. Allowing it to speak in even a moderate voice if I choose. It sounds very free flowing when I hear it, and I can only hope that you will be able to here it in the same way. Thank you for reading and God bless you ... ~
James ~
A contest entry
- We Gather Together Thanksgiving Contest by Star Shine.
800 points, ended November 28, 2008, 12 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Make Me Laugh by Pollycheck.
575 points, ended January 3, 53 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - In search of inspiration! by RestlessDreamer.
700 points, ended June 27, 132 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
How did it make you feel? What could I have done differently?
Comments
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Thank you for entering my contest. It is very obvious to the reader of this piece that it was written with much emotion and directly from the heart.
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This is eloquent and lyrical, with words of wisdom and personal experience. The beginning is so awesomely true, I beleive many can identify with it. Thank you for this great entry.
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constuctive criticism... can't do it.
This is not only wonderfully written but very moving and inspirational.
Awesome Write!
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This one is really beautiful, James! You have such a loving, generous spirit and such faith...it shows with every word you pen and share with us.
Lately (or, more correctly, for the last few years), I have been stuck in your first two verses, despite my faith.
"~ I was feeling the great heckler ...
taunting me, torturing me in my sorrow;-
making me sorely depressed,
angry, uncertain, ... lost ... and-
alone, and the lot;- towards my existence, ~
~ and I-still-do-not-know ...
nor care when, or from
whence it came, nor how-
through my bewilderment
it still remained to form, ~"
I am looking forward to continuing on to the third verse and getting OVER this blue funk of mine!
Much love and thank you,
Debbie
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I really liked this and all the emotion you have put into this...I can see so much of you from this poem and it was a great pleasure to read, thankyou for entering my contest and bless be x
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I agree....grab your gal and we'll hike up to the moutains
top and Shout unto the heavens,
THANK YOU GOD...don't know exactly how you did it...
but IT FEELS GREAT TO BE ALIVE!
(maybe we're part mule...just too stubborn...to do
what we know is good for us)
and when those dark clouds come, as they always do...
pick your pen and write it all out...and shoo..shoo...shoo,
out the windows they do fly!
ears/Seattle
well done!
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that was just sooo good!
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Tribute to the author's faith is apparently and abundantly clear within this well scripted verse. "On the other side" and all the more steely for the reckoning.
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This is a wonderful experience to pass on so others can benefit from it James. Your words give the reader the feeling of hope and peace and that's exactly what they should do. Good luck in the contests dear.
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This is great. I love the emotion and the hope that is given in the end. The way you wrote this is unorthodox but great. I pray you find the peace you need in your life. Again, great poem. Good job and good luck in the contest.
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Bravo!
A very powerful story of faith & personal resilience. Very uplifting words here.
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i really love this your words hold such power
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hmm this is good i liked it yes I think it is very good and will fit nicely in my contest it has a sense of hope and all to it there is light at the end of the tunnel after all
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beautiful
check out mine
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