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Too Long Quiet

Sitting here, trying to think
Never mind the subject, where are the words
Hurting my brain, trying to think

Some kind of poet, using no words
No point in writing when nothing is there
Blank paper only, using no words

Gotta get right, open my mind
My how I ponder with not enough thoughts
Must try harder, open my mind

Who can help, I just need a verse
Could be rhyming, prose, classic or modern
I ask not much, I just need a verse

Been silent so long, too long quiet
Believe me I'm noisy when I get in full flow
I need but a sound, too long quiet

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  • Layla Thomas
    December 24, 2008

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    time marches on they say
    rhyme nor reason in the way
    find a work, make it stay
    sounds sometimes get in the way
    a little sigh perhaps will inspire
    of what nature you may inquire
    think of it hmmm now i'll retire
    laugh with me laugh with me squire


  • worshipchick
    December 11, 2008

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    I love this piece! I have felt this way all too often. I love how you got a great piece of poetry out of it though! Brought a smile to my face. Keep writing! :-)


  • myrataal silver member
    November 24, 2008
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    Ah ... The wonder of the Muse called Silence ...

    and how she writes so eloquently her noise of none:
    erases all when we begin to try and copy phrases
    of her hush or push tranquility into the haste of rush.



    And all she wants of us is ... silence.

    Hallo Bill.
    Good to see you back.
    Thank you for remembering me.

    Love
    Myra


  • forever ever young
    November 22, 2008

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    Nothing

    i like how you've i got the feeling down great, i've tried to write something along these lines when there ws nothing and it came out crap, so i admire this


  • Deathless1
    November 21, 2008

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    nicely done.
    we all have those moments. lol
    i love how you throw the words back and forth.
    and you did this nicely.


  • just mercedes gold member
    November 20, 2008

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    You've started the process again, by the look of this.

    Nice poem, unusual form and rhyme scheme, so I'll have to come back and read more.

    Looking for inspiration? Start by naming the things around you.


  • Man of Harlech silver member
    November 20, 2008

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    This has a penultimate feel to it. The blank paper approach works the best. I compose on the computer, which is also very blank. I will definitely keep my eye out for your writing.


  • Lonely
    November 20, 2008
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    I seem to be going through the same situation Bill.. When you cant write and you so want to.. it hurts! I think you just penned down your feelings marvelously. Now you cant say you cannot write. I want to read more from you! I've missed your work.. and you!

    Love always
    Lonely


  • Edited
    November 20, 2008

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    so been there, and sits really cool when someone still writes even if it is of nothing, but i also find it gets the train rolling.

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