rain scribbles river
initiating small rivulet;
it flows,
grows bigger
with each addition of other.
A dam built across
stores water behind;
river course remains,
surplus water flowing
along defined course.
what ever we do;
alter its course
merge with other;
all water flows into sea
the story of water drop
has same ending;
finding union with great ocean.
Author notes
"Don't repeat chapters. The ending of the story will never change."
A contest entry
- PIF Weekend Quickie by ChunkyC.
800 points, ended November 24, 2008, 14 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I absolutely love how you have woven the authors notes with this poem. Especially the last line, it all fits together so perfectly. Well done my friend and all the best for the contest.
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I truly love the image and the concept that you have drawn from within this quote. I'm quite impressed. Great imagery and good meaning. Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.
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Fine Job
I love the message and story in this piece. It makes one look at the bigger piece of the smaller one. One drop of rain becoming an ocean. So inspirational. Great write, friend. ~
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thank you dear friend
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"all water flows into sea
the story of water drop
has same ending;
finding union with great ocean." - Great poem
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thank you
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