I'm feeling depressed,
I haven't gotten any rest.
The thought of you,
The thing we had was true.
I don't know why I'm depressed,
Probably because im so damn stressed.
Sitting,
Waiting.
That's all I do,
But my wish will never come true.
I wish for you to come back,
And that we could get back on track.
Depression hurts,
Why did you leave me behind in the dirt.
People ask what's wrong,
I think to myself because i don't belong.
I'm to depressed to eat,
All I want to do is sleep.
I miss you so much, why aren't you here?
Without you i cannot persevere.
My only thoughts are very dark,
On a suicidal trail i must embark.
Im writing this poem with a knife at my wrist,
Wondering if I'll be missed.
I drop the knife,
Wondering why i must endure this life.
Please kill me now before I change my mind,
Or ill pull the trigger and Ill be gone intoo the wind.
Waiting for you,
So that i can bid adieu.
A contest entry
- Break Up To Make Up by theredcatjazzoflove.
700 points, ended November 28, 2008, 8 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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wow this was amazing
such strong emotion
great job
thankyou for entering my contest
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I like the imagery of depression, the listlessness and fatigue descending. Good rhyme. Thank you for your entry.
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Deep, deep poem here. Very rhythmically pleasing and has an excellent flow. I commend your use of rhyme throughout, there were some moments of perfection. This poem is something that I know alot of people can relate to, myself included. I really felt the emotion in this poem and nothing was left unsaid. Even someone who had not suffered depression could draw alot of wisdom from this poem and that is definitely to your credit!
"Why did you leave me behind in the dirt.
People ask what's wrong,
I think to myself because i don't belong."
I really liked those lines, highlighted the isolation that you must have been feeling while writing this poem.
A very moving write, thanks for entering this into my competition!
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very deep poem you guys do not make my job easy now i have to go back and forth with myself on how i should reward this is what i call damn good poetry good luck in the contest
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Like it. Have you ever tried writing free verse...??
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